Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/ERG theory

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I would love to see this applied to an example of a real life case study, to see how it worked in the real world.--JulesCro (discuss • contribs) 18:11, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

I really enjoyed looking at how you set this out, really helpful and the use of the figures helps explain your evidence, perhaps a more specific integration of them in the final chapter would enhance the chapter.--Cedevlin9 (discuss • contribs) 02:15, 27 August 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:31, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title None I have added the title and sub-title Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Minimal, sufficient Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Section headings Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Overview - Consider: introducing an example or case study using one rather than two images Expand theory and research. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style (check italics). could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view. References Excellent Resources See also Very good Made minor changes External links Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:31, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (rename link to make it more user-friendly) Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Basic, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Use wiki-style headings so that the headings appear in the table of contents (see Tutorial 02) Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is presented with a relevant caption Adjust figure size to make it easy to read The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation - I've adjusted the first reference doi formatting - I've adjusted the first reference Resources See also Excellent Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Also link to related book chapters Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Not developed External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:19, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter Ideally, this would serve as a gateway chapter to other needs-related chapters by providing embedded links to those chapters. For additional feedback, see the following comments and [ these copyedits] Overview Basic Overview Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Lack of sufficient citation Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2] Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10) Replace double spaces with single spaces Figures Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Very few references :( References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end No use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Also include links to relevant Wikipedia articles. Poor use of external links in the "External links" section. Move academic articles into References. See Tutorial 02 for how to format external links. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:43, 2 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good/ presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Briefly explain why this topic is important An Overview of topics is provided (helpful). Consider pushing these topics into focus questions (requires more indepth thinking) Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little It could be helpful to point the ERG model as a simplified version of Maslow's hierarchy of needs. It may also be helpful to point out the alternative two-level model (deficit vs. growth needs). The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented. Include the take-home message(s) Yes, people are motivated by different things, but the ERG model (like Maslow's hierarchy of needs) that lower levels need to be reasonably satisfied in order to support pursuit of higher needs. Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is clear and well paced Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was poor. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Hide the presentation tools in the bottom-left Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check capitalisation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. However a mobile link to the chapter is provided - use a desktop link (mobiles will adjust automatically). The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources are communicated Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:01, 8 November 2022 (UTC)