Template:MEBF/2017
Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 3 December 2017 (UTC)
Detailed example
editExample use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:
<!-- Official book chapter feedback --> {{MEBF/2017 |1= <!-- Overall comments... --> # Overall, this chapter... # Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem. # Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. # For additional feedback, see [ these copyedits]. |2= <!-- Theory comments... --> # Theories are well described and explained. # Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. # There is too much general theoretical material about emotion. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic. # The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. |3= <!-- Research comments... --> # Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. # When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. # Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. # Some statements are unreferenced - see the {{fact}} tags |4= <!-- Written expression comments... --> # Written expression ## The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. ## The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). ## Write for an international, not just Australian audience. [https://tradingeconomics.com/australia/population Australians make up only 0.33% of the world human population]. ## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. ## Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. ## Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. ## Some sentences are overly long (e.g., *). ## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags ## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. ## Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). ## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. ## Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. ## Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. ## Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. # Layout ## The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. ## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. ## Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections. ## See earlier comments about [[#Heading casing|heading casing]]. # Learning features ## [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|Interwiki links]] are well used. ## Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. ## Use in-text [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]], rather than external links. ## Basic use of images. ## Basic use of tables. ## Basic use of quizzes. ## Basic use of case studies. # Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. ## Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the {{spelling}} tags). ## The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the {{grammar}} tags). ## More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. ## Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). ## Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). ## Check and correct use of commas. ## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=grammar+that+vs+who&oq=grammar+that+vs+who&aqs=chrome..69i57j0l5.5843j0j7&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8 that vs. who]. ## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=affect+vs.+effect+grammar&oq=affect+vs.+effect+grammar&aqs=chrome..69i57j0l5.5132j0j7&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8 affect vs. effect]. # APA style ## Use APA style for Figure captions. ## Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. ## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). ## Direct quotes need page numbers. ## Citations ### In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. ### When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001). ### A full stop is needed after et al. ### Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. ### A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors. ### Check and correct use of [http://research.moreheadstate.edu/c.php?g=107001&p=695202 citations for sources with six or more authors]. ## References are not in full APA style e.g., ### Check and correct capitalisation. ### Check and correct italicisation. ### Add spaces between author initials. ### See [http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html new doi format]. ### Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes. }}
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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