Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the Motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.

Simple example

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See also detailed example

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{{MEBF/2016
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#Overall comments...
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#Theory comments...
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#Research comments...
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#Written expression comments...}}
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Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall

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  1. Overall comments...
  1. Theory comments...
  1. Research comments...
  1. Written expression comments...

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 3 December 2016 (UTC)

Detailed example

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Here's an example use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:

<!-- Official book chapter feedback -->
{{MEBF/2016
|1=
#Overall, 
|2=
#Theory comment
|3=
#Research comment
#When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
#Some statements were unreferenced - see the {{fact}} tags 
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#Written expression
##The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
## Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
## Some sentences were overly long e.g., *
## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags
## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
## Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
#Learning features
##Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] would make the text more interactive.
#Spelling, grammar and proofreading
## The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the {{grammar}} tags
## Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
## Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
#APA style
## In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
## When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and then in the next paragraph cite Smith et al. (2001).
## Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)
## Direct quotes need page numbers.}}
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gives

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall

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  1. Overall,
  1. Theory comment
  1. Research comment
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
    2. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
    3. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. Some sentences were overly long
    5. Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the [explain?] tags
    6. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
    7. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
    8. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    9. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
  2. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links?
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    2. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
    3. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
  4. APA style
    1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
    2. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and then in the next paragraph cite Smith et al. (2001).
    3. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. Numbers under 10 should be written in words e.g. five
    5. Direct quotes need page numbers.