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Overall, this would have been a good first draft for comment. Much of the content lacks sufficient in-text citation (particularly in the first half). I think one thing that may be happening here is that you are adding a citation at the end of the paragraph and assuming that it applied to the whole paragraph. But you should providing a citation for each key sentence. Self-discipline should be more clearly related to motivation theory. More detailed should use should be made of peer-reviewed research. There were no additional learning features.
The chapter could have benefited from a more developed introduction, with clear focus questions. Getting comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped with this aspect.
Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
