Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Perimenopause and emotion regulation

Heading casing

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Hi U3236447. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:02, 17 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

 
  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure
  2. Remove citations from headings
  3. Definitional sections about PM and ER respectively should be brief with embedded links to further information about these as stand-alone concepts. The chapter should concentrate on their relationship. This relationship could be unpacked into sub-headings (e.g., consider specific hormones?).
  4. Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure
  5. Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  6. Definition(s) tend to be pedestrian headings. Consider incorporate definitional material into the Overview and/or subsequent sections with embedded inter-wiki link(s) to further information.
  1. Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions
  2. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  4. Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and reasonably well aligned top-level headings
  5. Closer alignment between the focus questions and top-level headings is recommended
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  3. Would like to see expansion of theory and research about the PM and ER relationship
  4. Promising balance of theory and research.
  5. Ideally, include more examples to help illustrate the best psychological science about this topic
  6. Emotion regulation info appears to be quite generic; ideally, tailor to PM
  7. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  2. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  4. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information
  1. Very good
  2. Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links
  3. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Excellent
    2. Use sentence casing
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:00, 17 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Page feedback

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Hi Chloe, your page is looking amazing! Extremely informative and really easy to read. My only advice for you is maybe splitting up the quiz questions throughout the page a little more. Instead of having a big chunk of questions at the end of a lot of text, you could have 1 or 2 after each smaller section. Looking forward to seeing the end result of your book chapter! :) Tatteredwing (discusscontribs) 03:38, 27 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hi Chloe, completely agree with @Tatteredwing that your page looks amazing. I can see that you've put a lot of effort into it. The figures are so helpful and your information flows well. I noticed in the rubric that we're also assessed on how we critically analyse the current field of research so perhaps you could pop in a couple of sentences on that. Hope that helps and all the best for your submission! U3216883 (discusscontribs) 07:32, 30 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an outstanding chapter. It successfully integrates psychological theory and research in a highly readable way to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image
  3. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Clear focus questions
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds very effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles
  3. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  5. Key citations are well used
  6. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance
  3. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory
  1. Excellent summary and conclusion
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent
    1. Figures
      1. Very well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style
    2. Tables
      1. Table captions use APA style or wiki style
      2. Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style
    3. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.)
    4. References use excellent APA style:
      1. Remove "doi:" prior to the "http ...."
      2. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Excellent use of image(s)
  5. Excellent use of table(s)
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  7. Excellent use of case studies or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
  1. ~20 logged, useful, mostly minor/moderate/major social contributions with mostly direct links to evidence
  2. Links to talk page comments were not direct
  3. Thanks very much for your extensive contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:07, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
  4. Useful focus questions are presented
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. There is too much content (goes over time)
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation makes no use of citations to support claims
  7. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples
  8. The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice
  9. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  2. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well well paced
  4. Good intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was good
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by relevant images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  7. The visual content is well matched to the target topic
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. An excellent written description of the presentation is provided
  3. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features)
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details (e.g., in the description).
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated in the description but not the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:06, 5 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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