Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Intentional pregnancy motivation

Heading casing

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Hi Biancagouws. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:30, 5 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic.
  3. Consider integrating the religious and cultural section (e.g., tradition and ritual is often closely associated with religious); both of which are arguably a sub-set of social motivations
  4. Excellent alignment between focus questions and heading structure
  1. Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions
  2. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. Simplify/abbreviate. Make this section more user-friendly. Move detail into subsequent sections.
  4. Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings
  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. The key points could be strengthened by providing more citations to psychological science
  3. For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  2. Use APA style (i.e., capitalise Figure)
  1. Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Consider including more quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. Insufficient
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. alphabetical order
    2. capitalisation
    3. italicisation
    4. doi formatting
    5. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
    6. use dois where available instead of other links
  5. Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. OK
    2. Move academic sources into references and cite
  1. Used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. At least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:12, 19 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Grammar notes

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Hey Bianca,

Sorry to be a bit overbearing with grammar, but while I was reading through your chapter, I was captivated by it as a whole, and thought that the only issues I had with it was the capitalisations. Your piece is going to be really good once it's a bit more fleshed out, but thought I'd help out a little if I can :).

Hope you're well!

TD TJDuus (discusscontribs) 12:22, 23 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. Move embedded external links to academic articles into the References section, include links as dois, and provide APA style citation to the article in the main body text
  4. Move embedded non-peer-reviewed links into the External links section
  5. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes.
  6. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Clear focus questions
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds reasonably well on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles
  3. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  5. Key citations are well used
  6. Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Good review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  4. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  5. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Very good summary and conclusion
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
  2. Layout
    1. Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold)
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent
    1. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
    2. Figures
      1. Very well well captioned
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    3. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.)
    4. References use good APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Move non-peer reviewed links into the External links section
  1. Very good use of learning features
  2. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Very good use of feature box(es)
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Check and correct capitalisation
    2. Use alphabetical order
  10. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Ignored for marking purposes (over word count)
    2. Use sentence casing
    3. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~3 logged, useful, mostly minor social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:30, 23 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. The presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
  2. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest  
  3. A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  4. The presentation makes little use of psychological research
  5. The presentation makes no use of citations to support claims
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples
  7. The presentation provides practical advice
  8. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides a good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  2. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit
  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by video and/or images
  6. The presentation is very well produced
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
  3. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features)
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:27, 5 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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