Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Effort justification

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Rename or remove "Introduction". The Overview should do this job. Or rename/restructure to be more specific. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Good balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented and captioned The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: italicisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) 8. Resources See also Good One of two link types provided Also link to related book chapters External links One of two required external links provided Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link 9. User page Basic – minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter 10. Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence (see Tutorial 03). Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:02, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Theory is reasonably well covered. Research coverage is light. There is a notable lack of sufficient citation of the best psychological sources about this topic. Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Use open-ended rather than closed-ended focus questions Theory A good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained It is unclear why self-esteem is included Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Some use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are well referenced Some/Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic The target audience is international, not domestic. Only 0.3% of the world human population lives in Australia. Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') [2] Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Figures Provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) A small list of references is used; it doesn't appear that the best psychological theory and research about this topic has been used to prepare the chapter References use basic APA style: Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois (fixed) Move non-peer reviewed links into the External links section Learning features Basic use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Link to the best 3 to 6 external resources about this topic Provide the title Rename links per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:19, 20 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview The opening slide(s) clearly conveys the purpose of the presentation The presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example or explain importance) Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples The presentation provides useful practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation An excellent written description of the presentation is provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:15, 9 November 2024 (UTC)