Latest comment: 2 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi @emdawson02! I really like your initial example of friend A and friend B, but I thought it could be even more engaging if you included an image of two friends to give the scenario some imagery :) Keep up the good work! Emeweme (discuss • contribs) 04:13, 15 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 2 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.
A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section
Explain the connection between the scenario and the topic (DF and M/E)
Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
These focus questions are too broad/unrelated to the target topic (see the sub-title and unpack it to allow you to synthesise the best psychological science that answers the sub-title question)
Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations
Too much about definitional/tangential matters; too little about the relationship between DF and M/E
Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan
Conclusion (the most important section):
Under developed
What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
Very brief description about self – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
One out of three types of contributions made with with indirect link(s) to evidence
The other types of contribution are making:
direct improvements to other book chapters (past or current)
posts about the unit or project on other platforms
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Latest comment: 29 days ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is a promising chapter in terms of its readability and general theoretical background, but it provides insufficient integrated review of relevant research
The chapter is written in plain language, which provides excellent readability
There is some useful theoretical background
More detail about dopamine fasting interventions would be useful
More examples would be useful
Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in many places (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
There is insufficient critical review of relevant research
A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
I didn't get a good sense of where "dopamine fasting" comes from and what its cultural history is from the way in which the concept was introduced.
Ideally, provide more emphasis on dopamine fasting theory.
A promising range of ideas are presented but it is not clear whether this material is derived from a first person reading of the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic
Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) and move the current embedded external links to the External links section
Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts. Consider using more.
Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
Layout
Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
Move links to non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
Basic use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of case studies or examples
Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Also include links to related Wikipedia articles
Use sentence casing
Use alphabetical order
Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 4 days ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
An excellent written description of the presentation is provided
An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features)