Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Cultural variations in power motivation

Initial suggestions

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@D. E. Finlay: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:14, 6 August 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (grammar fixed)
  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure – could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure
  2. The first focus question isn't needed. A brief definition can be provided with an embedded to link more info in related book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles
  3. The third focus question is the most important. But really the key questions probably should be around unpacking the extent to which power motivation is influenced by culture.
  4. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections
  1. Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions
  2. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section. Consider increasing image size.
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided. Keep it brief. Move detail into subsequent sections.
  4. Use 3rd person perspective except within scenario/feature boxes when 2nd person perspective can be used.
  5. The focus questions could be honed/sharpened
  6. Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings
  1. Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Field theory may be of interest, although I'm not sure if it has been applied to power motivation
  3. Perhaps also consider interconnections with dark triad traits to the extent that they are culturally facilitated or prevented
  4. Promising balance of theory and research
  5. Perhaps consider using an example of an egalitarian culture with low investment in individual power; sometimes the "opposite" can provide a compelling demonstration
  6. Conclusion is underway
  7. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. Excellent - One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented, captioned, and cited
  2. The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text
  3. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text
  4. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  4. Promising use of one or more table(s)
  5. Add table caption
  1. Excellent
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Check and correct APA referencing style:
    1. italicisation (missing for a small number of references)
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
    2. Use alphabetical order
  2. External links
    1. Excellent
    2. Use alphabetical order
  1. Minimal, but sufficient
  2. Brief description about self – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making:
  3. To add direct links to evidence of talk page contributions: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:10, 31 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and reasonably good use of research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. In some places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon
  4. The focus questions are clear and relevant
  1. A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Much of the discussion of theory is implied rather than explicit
  3. Builds effectively on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles
  4. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  6. Key citations are well used
  7. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  8. Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  9. Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Reasonably good review of relevant research
  2. More detail and synthesis of key studies would be ideal
  3. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  4. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Reasonably good integration between theory and research
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance
  1. Good summary and conclusion
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
    5. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. "incredible") in science-based communication
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter structure is underdeveloped; consider expanding
  3. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of that vs. who
  4. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, communicate about concepts in your own words
    2. Tables
      1. Use APA style for captions (see example)
      2. Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style
    3. Citations use very good APA style (7th ed.). To improve:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
      2. List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname
    4. References use excellent APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
  1. Very good use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of figure(s)
  5. Basic use of table(s)
  6. Very good use of feature box(es)
  7. Very good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
    2. Add more links
  1. ~14 logged, useful, mostly moderate to major contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:13, 30 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation
  1. The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a reasonably good way
  2. The presentation has an example to engage audience interest. Perhaps the example could be improved by illustrating cultural variations in power.
  3. A basic context for the presentation is established
  4. Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation makes very good use of citations to support claims
  7. Use APA style for citations
  8. The presentation makes reasonably good use of one or more examples
  9. The presentation provides useful practical advice
  10. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides an excellent summary of the most relevant psychological theory and no summary of research about this topic
  2. The conclusion provides clear take-home message(s)
  1. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio
  2. Audio communication is well-paced
  3. Very good intonation
  4. The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed
  5. Recording volume was low
  6. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality
  7. Mute music while talking (to make it easier to listen to the narration)
  8. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is very good
  2. The presentation makes very good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication is supplemented in an excellent way by relevant images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  7. The visual content is well matched to the target topic
  1. The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. An excellent written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Excellent use of time codes
  4. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features)
  5. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. Author attribution and direct link needed for music
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:32, 9 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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