Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Abusive relationships and emotional dependency

Feedback

Hi @Lucywilson 546 I really like your chapter so far, it goes super in depth!

Just wanted to give some feedback surrounding the presentation of Bowlby's Attachment theory and the 4 main attachment styles.

I really enjoyed your approach of giving and overview of and providing a case study of each attachment style, it gives alot of good info and describes everything clearly.

however since its presented in a table it can make it quite difficult to read and follow, I myself had to scroll up and down a few times to remind myself of the titles and in general had a bit of trouble reading such a large amount of text in the smaller font size.

I personally believe that the information would be better suited for paragraphs, with each of the case studies in feature boxes to break everything up.

another good option could also be separating each attachment style into its own table, again with the case studies separate in there own feature boxes.

Good work with the chapter overall, I hope this helps a bit. U3230258 (discuss • contribs) 19:55, 5 October 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement is the use of the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) Move embedded non-peer-reviewed links into the External links section For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Remove subheadings (fixed) Engage reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Briefly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon; provide more detail Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader Theory A promising range of ideas are presented but it is far from clear how this material is derived from a first person reading of the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic Builds exceptionally well on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Promising use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Provide more detail about key studies including systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses in this area Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Layout The structure is overly complicated; aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Introduction and Conclusion Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold) Move links from headings into their first mention in text Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] APA style Direct quotes need citations and page numbers. They are overused – communicate about concepts in your own words. Figures Very well captioned Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Tables Use APA style for captions (see example) Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) The table is way too long (> 1300 words) and lacks sufficient relationship to the target topic. Abbreviate. Was the table created with AI? If so, this hasn't been acknowledged which would be a violation of academic integrity. Please see genAI content. Citations use poor APA style (7th ed.). References use poor APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Remove "Retrieved ..." Include hyperlinked dois (fixed) Move non-peer reviewed links into the External links section Move Wikipedia links into the see See also section Learning features Basic use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Move links to non-peer-reviewed sources to the External links section Very good use of image(s) Promising use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) Some non-integrated use of case studies or examples (move out of the table) No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, mostly minor contributions with indirect links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to make and record direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:27, 27 October 2024 (UTC)

=Resubmission feedback

These changes were reviewed:

1. Overview
   1. considerably improved
   2. overly focused on Australia
   3. overuses direct quotes
2. Theory
   1. improved
3. Research
   1. improved
4. Style
   1. improved slightly
5. Learning features
   1. improved

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:45, 12 November 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., by introducing a case study or scenario) A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic There is too much content to fit within the allocated time frame The presentation makes very basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes no use of examples The presentation provides useful practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Basic intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was basic Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well/reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic It is unclear why: A video of a screen is used (rather than a screencast) The camera is unsteady The slides are branded with Larana University There is a generic face icon in the bottom left of the slides The presentation makes reasonably good use of text based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A good written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Source of slide template is communicated in a general way A copyright license for the presentation is provided A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:57, 4 November 2024 (UTC)