Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Viewing natural scenes and emotion

Initial suggestions

@Alyson131: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Environment
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Nature
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:50, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Alyson131. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:31, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure HOWEVER, the content is too general (about nature in general - rather than viewing nature(al) scenes). Specifically zoom in on theory and research about the effects of viewing nature scenes (e.g., vs viewing non-nature scenes). This is similar to what's covered, but make sure to be focusing on the question in the sub-title - what is the best theory and research about the emotional (positive emotion and negative emotion) effect of viewing natural scenes. So, "How to incorporate nature into your life" is too broad - because it includes active participation in nature rather than focusing just on the research about viewing natural scenes Link to more info when it comes to the broader role of nature in human emotion Check and correct grammar (e.g., missing question marks) Overview Add a scenario in a feature box (with an image) at the start to help catch reader interest A brief description of the problem/topic is provided Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios) 1st two focus questions are appropriately targetted (in scope) 2nd two focus questions are too broad (outside scope) Key points Add an overview of viewing nature scene and emotion research This will probably require explaining positive and negative affect Look for systematic reviews if they are available Nature section is too broad; abbreviate and include in Overview; remove heading There is no need for the sections on disorders; focus on emotion instead Conclusion (the most important section): Needs work to provide a clear response to the sub-title question What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is not presented and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Very good Use consistent formatting of references (e.g., capitalisation varies) Resources See also Good Include source in brackets after link Also link to related book chapters External links Select links more judiciously - they need to be more directly related to the topic Target an international audience User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:32, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good to excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is the quality of written expression Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Solid summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are very briefly captioned Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Learning features Good to very good use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Good use of case studies or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Include sources in parentheses Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Move peer-reviewed articles into references and cite Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:03, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit (3 mins), so there was room for further development Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation The font size especially for the sub-title is very small. Consider increasing. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good to very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by incorporating more synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by providing more synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided This presentation may have violated the copyrights of image owners A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:54, 12 November 2023 (UTC)