Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Sublimation

Heading casing

Hi U3231448UC (Adam Roseby). FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:57, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@U3231448UC (Adam Roseby): Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Note that there was a previous attempt, so check out that chapter and the [on its talk page].

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Defence mechanisms
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:00, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi there,

I have put your focus questions in a box to make them stand out, I tried to move figure 1 around but wasn't sure where you might want it to go and i didn't want to delete it either. I was thinking maybe you could replace the meditation image with figure 1? Or the other way around?

Otherwise, great job!--MaryamNageeb (discuss • contribs) 12:48, 7 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and OK use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon The focus questions should unpack the sub-title and give a clear focus for the chapter The self-reflection style questions could be used elsewhere Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Definition should explain sublimation in a psychological context Overly focused on definitions and general theoretical background; instead summarise, link to related resources, and move to the more substantive aspects of theory Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations in some places (e.g., see the tags) Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good## Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Check and correct tense (e.g., Freud is dead, so he no longer "believes"; instead, he "believed") Layout Clear structure Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold) Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Focus on the concepts/ideas/theories/research rather than the author names in headings Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. This includes, for example, id, ego, and super-ego. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Write numbers under 10 using words (e.g., five). Express numbers 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 10). Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Very good use of learning features No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~1 logged, useful social contributions with direct links to evidence ~7 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:06, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 10 November 2023 (UTC)