Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Sadism motivation

Initial suggestions

@BM3062384: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Check out this video (also a podcast) - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l2og1DJvQ94. The title of the episode is misleading - it is an excellent discussion about the psychology of sadism in relation to personality, the dark triad, and dark tetrad.
• Check out other pain chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work.
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:04, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

@Jtneill: Thank you for the podcast link, I had discovered this in the wild first before reviewing this post - but I'm glad you raised it here and that you too had a view on the title. I had considered not adding it to my external links owing to the title, and to the controversy surrounding the host but this message helped convince me to do so, that amount of interview with Dr. Paulhaus is too hard to pass up. I hope you enjoy reviewing my work up to this point, I've enjoyed drafting it.

Kind regards, Brad BM3062384 (discuss • contribs) 15:59, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:50, 27 September 2023 (UTC)

Edits

Hi, thank you for this book chapter! I found the contents to be very interesting (and scary). I have made some changes to your reference list, I hope you don't mind! The only issue you had was the unnecessary capitalisation of words in the article title. Remember to only capitalise the first word, the first word after a colon, initials or acrynoms :).

Jingying Chen (discuss • contribs) 22:44, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:20, 12 November 2023 (UTC)