Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/GABA, motivation, and emotion

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:55, 29 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Suggestions/edits

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Hey there! looks like your chapter is coming along really nicely. I have noticed however, in your referencing that there are some non-academic sources in there. I have listed them down bellow with how you have formatted them and also added them to your external links with the correct links.

Pugle, M. (2022, November 4). GABA: What it is, functions, and disorders. Verywell Health. https://www.verywellhealth.com/gaba-5095143

Berry, J. (2023, January 12). Neurotransmitters: What they are, functions, and psychology. Medical News Today. https://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/326649#endorphins

C. C. medical. (n.d.). Gamma-aminobutyric acid (GABA): What it is, Function & Benefits. Cleveland Clinic. https://my.clevelandclinic.org/health/articles/22857-gamma-aminobutyric-acid-gaba

Biotechne. (n.d.). Synaptic neurotransmission pathways: GABAergic inhibition. www.rndsystems.com. https://www.rndsystems.com/pathways/synaptic-neurotransmission-pathways-gabaergic-inhibition

Let me know if I can do anything else and I hope this was helpful --Alice hatcher (discusscontribs) 08:01, 29 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Hi!
This seems like a super interesting topic. Due to its broad nature, the effect of GABA on motivation and emotion would have a lot of important clinical implications! Building on the references listed above, here are some more academic sources that I thought might be helpful:
Wirtshafter, D., & Stratford, T.R. (2010). Evidence for motivational effects elicited by activation of GABA-A or dopamine receptors in the nucleus accumbens shell.
Barson, J.R., & Leibowitz, S.F. (2015). GABA-induced inactivation of dorsal midline thalamic subregions has distinct effects on emotional behaviours. Clarestuparich (discusscontribs)Clarestuparich (discusscontribs) 11:25, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply



Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Overly complicated 3-level structure – consider simplifying to 2 levels
  3. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  4. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  5. Overall, the headings are too long
  6. Remove extra full-stops and colon from the end of headings
  1. Simplify/abbreviate - move detail into subsequent sections
  2. Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. Description of the problem/topic should be brief and evocative. Keep this section user-friendly. Move detail into subsequent section.
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is strongly recommended
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Too many acronyms are used - explain concepts more simply
  3. Move non-academic external links to the External links section
  4. Use interwiki linking style for Wikipedia links (see Tutorial 02)
  5. There's a lot of trees here but not so much forest; this plan would benefit by clarifying the focus questions and structuring the chapter around answering those questions using theory and research, with examples
  6. Golden rule/tip: Answer the question in the sub-title - that's what matters. Other related stuff might be interesting, but won't count for marking purposes for the book chapter or multimedia presentation
  7. How much of this is genAI content? GenAi content needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries otherwise it violates academic integrity.
  8. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. A relevant figure is presented and captioned
  2. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. OK
  2. Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links
  3. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. alphabetical order
    2. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
  5. It is likely this chapter will go over the maximum word count, so be selective about only including the best/most relevant references
  1. Not developed
  1. Created
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

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Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a good to very good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. This chapter could be improved by making the concepts more accessible to a wider audience
  3. This chapter could be improved by addressing previous feedback
  4. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader interest by presenting a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box
  3. Explain abbreviations in case study
  4. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  5. Clear focus questions
  1. A good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Provide some more basics e.g., What is GABA? What does it stand for? What is it made of?
  3. Explanations tend to be overly technical. Simple explanations are evidence of high-level understanding.
  4. Some aspects of the chapter aren't clearly related to GABA.
  5. Builds somewhat on Wikipedia articles; build more strongly on related book chapters
  6. Good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  7. How can healthy levels of GABA be maintained?
  8. Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
  9. Key citations are well used
  10. Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Good review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  4. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  5. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  6. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Very good integration between theory and research
  1. Excellent summary and conclusion
  2. Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic
  3. Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  4. Key points are well summarised
  5. Summarise key points
  6. Clear take-home message(s)
  7. Address the focus questions
  8. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good
  2. Layout
    1. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
    2. Avoid sections with only one sub-section
    3. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations are overused and poorly explained. Explain abbreviations (spell out) (e.g., HPA) when they are first introduced.
      2. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., etc.)
  3. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
  4. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
  5. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[1]. See explanatory video (1 min)
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
      2. Do not include author first name or initials
      3. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
    5. References use correct APA style
  1. Very good use of learning features
  2. Many of the embedded external links should instead be APA or wiki style citations or interwiki links to related book chapters or Wikipedia articles
  3. Two uses of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  4. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  5. Move links to non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
  6. Very good use of image(s)
  7. No use of table(s)
  8. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  9. Very good use of case studies or examples
  10. No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  11. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  12. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~7 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:18, 12 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed
  2. Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  4. Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
  5. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. What is GABA? Explain in simple terms.
  4. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation includes citations to support claims
  7. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s)
  2. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Good intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was good
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good
  2. The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  6. Some slides are a bit too busy/fast
  7. Too many unexplained abbreviations are used
  8. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  9. The presentation is reasonably well produced using simple tools
  10. The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
  2. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
  3. A link to the book chapter is not provided
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details (e.g., in the description).
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:08, 14 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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