Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Flourishing in the elderly

Initial suggestions

@JorjaFive: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Ageing
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Positive psychology
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:28, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments & suggestions

Hi Jorja, Just a quick suggestion, I noticed you had listed the suggested book topics a change, one really quick way you could make progress is to add those under the See Also heading. hope this helps --U3209567 (discuss • contribs) 08:28, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Thank you Thomas - that's a great suggestion :) JorjaFive (discuss • contribs) 10:25, 20 August 2023 (UTC)

Cultural variation in flourishing

May be of interest: https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s10902-023-00677-9 Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:05, 6 September 2023 (UTC)

Thanks Dr James, yes - it is an interesting article. Regards, Jorja JorjaFive (discuss • contribs) 08:22, 24 September 2023 (UTC)

Comments & suggestions

Hi @JorjaFive, I've made some minor edits and added some callouts. Here are some suggestions:

• It'll be good to see some scenarios added throughout and/or key points/questions, as you've noted in 'consider' boxes.
• In the misconceptions section, place 'myth' and 'fact' examples into a feature box, or even format as a quiz.
• A suggestion I received in my development feedback is to add pictures in my scenario boxes, and that would be a good addition for you as well.

I'm looking forward to seeing how your chapter develops! --U3213682 (discuss • contribs) 04:42, 27 September 2023 (UTC)

Hi Robbie @U3213682, thanks for your suggestions, some good ones for sure :) Regards, Jorja JorjaFive (discuss • contribs) 05:11, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

Hello Jorja,

I really appreciated you covering this topic, as I feel the eldery age group has not been a key focus in terms of previous book chapters. I am looking forward to reading your completed work! I watched this TED Talk which covers successful ageing, and thought it may be of interest to you. This can be a useful source under 'external links'. https://youtu.be/bPBJJ-lxsXA?si=CHaRr3raZG4Ofrpy

Angela

(U3227684 (discuss • contribs)=U3227684) (U3227684 (discuss • contribs)=U3227684 19:30 5 October 2023 (UTC).

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 1-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure to use second-level headings Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Remove overcapitalisation e.g., Positive Psychology -> positive psychology Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Excellent Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent User page Good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Edited figure

Hello, noticed there was inconsistency in your figures. some were italics and some were bold. I changed them all to bold. James mentioned so long they are consistent throughout then that should be fine.

Thanks U3217955 (discuss • contribs) 23:54, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

Hi Thrainn @U3217955, I appreciate you letting me know about the inconsistent figure captions :)

Regards, Jorja JorjaFive (discuss • contribs) 02:10, 12 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. JW edit - ah, yes, I see we were meant to include our Reference list in the word count - my mistake For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) JW edit - I would be grateful of any explicit suggestions - thanks :) Use open-ended rather than closed-ended focus questions JW edit - curious about this feedback - as I understand it - each of my four questions are open-ended - no simple yes/no or static response would answer the questions I posed :/ Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter JW edit - again, curious about this feedback - my focus questions are in a feature box :/ Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good to excellent review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Good summary and conclusion Only the first quarter is considered for marking purposes due to being over the maximum word count Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent The main area for improvement is making the writing 20% shorter Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.). For example: List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References use excellent APA style: Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Good use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~30 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks very much for your extensive contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:43, 21 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation The presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A context for the presentation is established Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes very good use of citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion The conclusion provides a good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides very good take-home message(s) The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit JW edit - curious about feedback points 3 & 4 - my presentation registers as 2 minutes 59 seconds on YouTube :/ Audio The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes very good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation An excellent written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:31, 22 November 2023 (UTC)