Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Empathy and psychopathy

Initial suggestions

@U3218292: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Empathy and psychopathy are arguably different ends of a single continuum
• This discussion has a misleading title, but relevant: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l2og1DJvQ94 (there are also podcast versions available)
• Check out other empathy chapters and psychopathy chapters to see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work.

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:59, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3218292. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:19, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic Empathy and psychopathy are discussed as separate constructs. But the topic is about their relationship. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory, but lacks insight into the relationship between empathy and psychopathy. The presentation makes no explicit use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit The Conclusion lacked insight into the best theory and research about the relationship between empathy and psychopathy Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is somewhat well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about the relationship between empathy and psychopathy Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is somewhat matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about the relationship between empathy and psychopathy Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details (e.g., in the description). Image sources and their copyright status are not provided This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement Probably the images are freely available via the editing package but this is not explicitly stated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:14, 14 November 2023 (UTC)