Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Commitment bias

Initial suggestions

@U3203936: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Cognitive
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Relationships
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:40, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:52, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure See earlier comment about Heading casing Top-level headings are vague/general e.g., expand "Commitment Bias" heading (since this is also the chapter title) Consider the possibility of using (focus) questions as the top-level headings to give a sharper structure Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Basic overview Add a scenario in a feature box (with an image) at the start to help catch reader interest A brief description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Use APA style for citations (e.g., learn how to use et al.; remove initials) Remove overcapitalisation (e.g., Commitment Bias -> commitment bias For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) – even better, write in your own words Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) – more info Conclusion (the most important section): ## Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Learning feature Case study underway Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Good OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources Good Use sentence casing 1 out 2 external links provided Include source in brackets after link User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. The link provided is private. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made Some direct and some indirect links to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:52, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Consider providing a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Also consider the psychological literature about "letting go of goals" Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Reasonably good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts The ChatGPT how to eliminate commitment bias content is very raw, so needs a lot of reworking and the addition of appropriate citations Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Summarise key points more clearly Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout The chapter structure could be improved Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Provide more descriptive headings See earlier comments about heading casing Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) > Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Minimal use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Minimal use of image(s) No use of table(s) Minimal use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Reasonably good use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use sentence casing Minimal use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence One edit added unnecessary capitalisation One logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:52, 2 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Include more citations to support claims The presentation makes extensive use of one case study The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a good take-home message Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement Reasonably good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was good. However, it was on the quieter side (I needed to turn volume to near max) and some keyboard/mouse clicks are audible. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 9 November 2023 (UTC)