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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.
Revise the headings to focus more specifically on "What is the relationship between body functionality and body satisfaction?". For example, this doesn't ask about cultural, historical, developmental etc. perspectives - it asks about what a relationship between two constructs. Seek out the best psychological theory and research about this topic and report on it.
Check and correct spelling and grammar. The expression of the headings could benefit from academic support, such as through Studiosity.
Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections
Limited development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples
It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan
Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
The key focus for this chapter should ideally have been Alleva and Tylka (2021) which is cited several times, but the central theories and arguments etc. of that article are not represented as deeply as they could or should be
The relevance of the table was unclear
The chapter wanders off a bit into discussion about irrelevant theory
Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full sentences and paragraphs
Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
Abbreviations
Only use abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) inside parentheses
Spelling
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s)
Basic use of table(s)
Very good use of feature box(es)
Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Good use of case studies or examples
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Use alphabetical order
Good use of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it does not focus specifically on the psychological theory and research about this topic: "What is the relationship between body functionality and body satisfaction?". Instead, the presentation offers a broader take on body satisfaction.
The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
Audio communication is well paced
Use greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
Audio recording quality was basic. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The narrated content is somewhat matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch