Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Anomie and motivation

Initial suggestions

@U3223909: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other social psychology chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work.
• A case study could consider anomie theory as it relates to colonialism and Indigenous Australians
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:28, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 3-level heading structure – could benefit from simplifying to a 2-level structure Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings (e.g., if there is 2.1 there should also be 2.2) Consider closer alignment between top-level headings and focus questions Overview Promising Case study is rather abstract; consider personalising Consider adding an image to the case study to help attract reader interest My sense is anomie is a concept that overlaps sociology and psychology - if so, this might be worth pointing out Excellent focus questions - but these could also be varied - just keep checking how closely they tie back into the sub-title question Key points Promising, but be more ruthless in directly focusing on the question in the sub-title Include more practical examples of anomie (e.g., move First Nations Australians box up higher). That case study could benefit from more citations. Consider adding an image (e.g., there are colonial paintings of Indigenous Australians on Wikimedia Commons) What is anomie? This section should also include some connection to motivation Micro-level and institutional (is this macro-level??) anomie sections don't have sufficient relevance to motivation - work on this as a key priority I-E motivation is the most promising section because it brings A and M together. But why only focus on I-E motivation and not other aspects of motivation (e.g., learned helplessness)? In general, avoid starting so many sentences with author names. Unless their name is particularly pertinent, consider moving the citation to the end of the sentence. This will lead to a more readable writing style. Promising balance of theory and research# Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) First Nations case study currently looks like a long paragraph - consider perhaps how to abbreviate and/or break up Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Excellent Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent User page Good Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:24, 22 September 2023 (UTC)

Feedback and suggestions

Hi,

This is an intriguing emotion and I'm enjoying learning about it through your chapter! Your case study at the beginning was informative in that it help me understand the concept of anomie clearly. Well done! I noticed that there are no hyperlinks to Wikipedia pages and thought this might be relevant for relevant theorists such as Émile Durkheim and the relevant theories you've highlighted such as intrinsic/extrinsic motivation and learned helplessness.

Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading your finished chapter. U3197031 (discuss • contribs) 03:44, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

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