Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Suffering as emotion

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Promising, logical 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic; coping needs refinement Key points Basic development of key points for each section for most sections Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Excellent But these references weren't cited? Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:05, 27 September 2022 (UTC)

Suggestion to consider Viktor E. Frankl's Logotherapy

Hi!

I just came across your book chapter after I left a comment on the UCLearn discussion board 'Favourite motivational videos etc.' that is very relevant to your chapter.

I suggested in my discussion board post that I feel very motivated and inspired by one of my favourite books Man's Search for Meaning by Viktor E. Frankl. If you were familiar with it, or are happy to research it, Frankl survived the Holocaust and developed his own therapeutic approach called Logotherapy.

Logotherapy is strongly based around the meaning of human suffering and offers a motivating perspective on how to cope with suffering.

I was thinking that Frankl's own experiences with suffering could be a powerful case study section of your book chapter, potentially.

Just a suggestion, best of luck with completing your chapter! :) U3213441 (discuss • contribs) 06:27, 9 October 2022 (UTC)

Suggestions for this chapter

Hello! I was curious about your chapter and did some of my own reading and found a good article on suffering, how it is measured, some coping strategies and an empirical evaluation of response to suffering. Ill link the paper and it may be useful when finishing up the chapter. Hope this helps! https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0277953619300413 U3216389 (discuss • contribs) 00:51, 14 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Overview Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration There is reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Direct quotes are over-used. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Check and make correct use of commas [1] Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Check and correct use of commas References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent/very good/good/basic/insufficient Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Citations and links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section Basic use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:41, 17 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the topic is established Focus questions are presented, but the Overview slide is overly complicated for a 3 minute presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Limited coverage of coping Includes citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well paced Good intonation Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic Direct quotes are over-used Direct quotes need page numbers for the source The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check punctuation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:52, 22 November 2022 (UTC)