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I think there is an opportunity to provide an internal link to a Wikipedia page on Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs under the 2nd heading - satisfies the assessment criteria and is also helpful for people who aren't as informed on the ideas of this theory. I also think there is potential to discuss the impact that self actualisation will have on an individual, for example higher satisfaction/happiness and high self efficacy. U3202026 (discuss • contribs) 00:31, 28 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
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Well done with your chapter so far. I have made some suggestions for some grammatical changes. For instance, at times your inconsistent with your capitals when writing "self-actualisation". Secondly, there is a sentence that could be made more concise. Lastly, perhaps revisit this in-text citation (Reeve, 2018; Fabian, 2019). U3177123 (discuss • contribs) 11:51, 12 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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Use default heading formatting (e.g., avoid bold, italics, underline etc.).
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
The most important feedback is to be careful to address the topic/answer the question. This should not be a chapter about self-actualisation per se but about what motivates self-actualisation - there is a subtle, but important difference. Make sure the structure, focus, and content are sufficiently disciplined to focus on the latter. In this respect, the most important of the proposed content is probably in the "SDT posits a spectrum of motivation from intrinsic to extrinsic" section.
Overview - Consider adding:
focus questions.
an image.
an example or case study.
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Good development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
Inclusion of theory and research.
Conclusion is well developed.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
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Hi,
I did an edit of your whole chapter, I suggest removing most of the dot pints, and introduce a topic before having a subheading under the main heading ie. not going straight from the heading to a subheading but discussing what this section as a whole is focussing on. Nice work!
--U3201178 (discuss • contribs) 01:36, 16 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi there! Your book chapter is looking great you've done a really good job! I particularly liked that in your "Types of extrinsic motivation" table you not only provided a description but an example too! One thing I would suggest though if you have the time is to eliminate some of the dot points so they are just paragraphs. For example, your "Developmental criteria for self-actualisation" section can benefit from no use of dot points and just paragraphs. Additionally with your "goal setting" section double check that the indentations fit within its context, if that makes sense! Hope that all makes sense. Otherwise amazing work! --U3179701 (discuss • contribs) 21:27, 18 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
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The main areas for potential improvement are to focus more on self-actualisation rather than general motivational theory and to integrate a review of research about self-actualisation.
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Basic but sufficient coverage of directly relevant theory is provided
There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., the middle half of the chapter doesn't refer to self-actualisation!?). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
Figures
Figures are well captioned
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
Overall, the use of learning features is excellent
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
Excellent use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s)
Excellent use of table(s)
Excellent use of feature box(es)
Excellent use of quiz(zes)
Excellent use of case studies or examples
Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Good use of external links in the "External links" section
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