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Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings - I've adjusted the Overview sub-headings to be bold but not headings
This chapter will be a gateway to more specific chapters e.g., about dopamine, nucleus accumbens etc. So, for those key topics, look to summarise and provide embedded links to more specific chapters.
Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
3rd focus question is useful, but not necessary; so, if word count becomes an issue, that could be truncated, with links to dedicated chapters (e.g., hijack hypothesis)
Promising balance of theory and research
Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Promising use of examples/case studies
Be wary of overusing Reeve (2018) as a citation; ideally, go to original sources that may be cited in Reeve
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1. when doing an in-text citation of a textbook (not for journal articles unless you quote) for a specific idea (like the brain reward system or a brain function table) it is useful for the reader to know the page number your are referencing, for example (Reeve, 2018, p. xxx) or multiple pages (Reeve, 2018, pp. xxx-xxx) is easier for the reader than (Reeve, 2018). It is consistent with APA referencing but I encourage you to look it up for further information if needed. Hope this helps. --Alec.cortez (discuss • contribs) 22:30, 15 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
2. I note your title has a capital D (in differences), this should be lower case according to APA Style, where the first word after the colon is capitalized only if it begins a complete sentence.--Alec.cortez (discuss • contribs) 23:27, 15 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
3. You have three figures on the right hand column (which is great). It would be beneficial to link them to your text. for example., ....the reward system in the nucleus accumblems, see figure 1
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem
This was everything I had hoped for, for this chapter, and more - congratulations
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Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold)
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
Figures
Figures are reasonably well captioned
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation)
Overall, the use of learning features is excellent
Some use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very good use of image(s)
Excellent use of table(s)
Excellent use of feature box(es)
Excellent use of quiz(zes)
Good use of case studies or examples
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
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A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent/very good/good take-home message(s)
A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary
The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question)
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question
The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A written description of the presentation is provided
Excellent use of time codes
A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access