Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Motivational music and exercise

Heading casing

Hi U3183466. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:47, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Well recorded But note that I've reverted that edit that removed an expansion tag for the introduction to a section with sub-headings Headings Basic, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research; this doesn't necessarily mean separate theory, research, and integration sections. Perhaps consider the focus questions first that could help to answer the topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Then consider using headings that tackle each focus question. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A figure is presented, but there seems to be mismatch between the caption and the topic, as exercise isn't depicted. Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:19, 27 September 2022 (UTC)

Some references I found

Hi, I found some references that could be useful for you :)

1) Ballmann, C. G. (2021). The Influence of Music Preference on Exercise Responses and Performance: A Review. Journal of Functional Morphology and Kinesiology, 6(2), 33. doi:10.3390/jfmk6020033

2) Karow, M. C., Rogers, R. R., Pederson, J. A., Williams, T. D., Marshall, M. R., & Ballmann, C. G. (2020). Effects of Preferred and Nonpreferred Warm-Up Music on Exercise Performance. Perceptual and Motor Skills, 003151252092824. doi:10.1177/0031512520928244

3) Ballmann, C. G., Cook, G. D., Hester, Z. T., Kopec, T. J., Williams, T. D., & Rogers, R. R. (2020). Effects of Preferred and Non-Preferred Warm-Up Music on Resistance Exercise Performance. Journal of Functional Morphology and Kinesiology, 6(1), 3. doi:10.3390/jfmk6010003

4) Ballmann, C. G., McCullum, M. J., Rogers, R. R., Marshall, M. M., & Williams, T. D. (2018). Effects of Preferred vs. Nonpreferred Music on Resistance Exercise Performance. Journal of Strength and Conditioning Research, 1. doi:10.1519/jsc.0000000000002981

The overall findings of these are that listening to your preferred music should improve your motivation, power, heart rate, and performance (When compared to no music or non-preferred music). However, music has no effect on your perceived exertion.

This means that, music motivates and improves our motivation to exercise and our performance. But it doesn't lessen the strain that exercise has on our bodies.

I hope this helps

Sebastian Sebastian Armstrong (discuss • contribs) 06:45, 28 September 2022 (UTC)

As per our discussions

Hi, good job adding paragraph headings, topic sentences and paragraph plans as we discuss. The next thing I would suggest is to start writing sentences in your paragraph plan.

(e.g. turning " - Lack of effect on maximum muscle strength" into "It is true music can motivate people to start exercising and has many positive effects on your performance. However, *Reference and Reference* found that listening to music has little to no effect on one's maximum output or strength" )

After which, start linking the individual sentences in your paragraphs together, then link your different paragraphs to one another.

I think you have got this and you are doing a good job. Sebastian Armstrong (discuss • contribs) 03:07, 14 October 2022 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hey! good work on your book chapter so far, I have found this article Kao, T.-a., & Oxford, R. L. (2014). Learning language through music: A strategy for building inspiration and motivation. System, 43, 114-120. https://doi.org/https://doi.org/10.1016/j.system.2014.01.003 about how music can motivate people to learn new language, thought it might be interesting to have a read over. Hope it helps! --U3230861 (discuss • contribs) 07:00, 16 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes reasonably good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Probably too long. Move detailed content in subsequent sections. The purpose of the Overview is to briefly explain the topic, engage reader interest, and establish focus questions for the chapter. Focus less on motivation in general, even exercise, and more on the relationship between music and exercise motivation. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are reasonably well selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Reasonably good review of relevant research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses (e.g., from related areas) would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are referenced Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration There is reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois without "DOI: " Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient Minimal use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~9 logged, mostly last minute social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:55, 2 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to Audio communication is well paced Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well performed Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:12, 22 November 2022 (UTC)