Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Insular cortex and emotion

Social contributions - U3215103

It would be great for your book chapter to look into the theory of the mind for your theories of emotions section!

U3215103 (discuss • contribs) 12:25, 28 August 2022 (UTC)

Feedback on plan

Overall, the plan for this chapter looks promising:

• title/sub-title correct
• 2-level heading structure promising; consider expanding to flesh out
• Overview text can be briefer. Aim to capture attention with illustration of the "problem", highlight focus questions, and consider including an example/case study and an image
• Good use of embedded links for key words; also consider linking like this to related book chapters (e.g., see Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Cortex)
• References are well formatted except for some lacking italicisation
• Resources (See also and External links) look excellent

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:38, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand, particularly with regard to further research. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Builds reasonably well on related chapters. Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Reasonably good overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research – Key findings No comment Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments Claims are referenced. Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Figures Figures are very well used. Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example. Tables are referred to using APA style. Citations use correct APA style. References use almost correct APA style. Italicisation missing from some journal titles Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). Excellent use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~19 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions across several channels with direct links to evidence. Thanks very much for your extensive contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:42, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Focus questions are presented (although probably too many, too briefly) Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. The presentation is well structured The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home messages The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to Audio communication is clear and well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent/very good/good/basic The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check consistency of capitalisation with book chapter. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:07, 7 November 2022 (UTC)