Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Hypomania and emotion

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Hey Alec,

This topic will be incredibly interesting! To help you get a start on some research, I found a source that looks at the role of emotional dysregulation and Bipolar disorder (BD) with a specific focus on healthy populations with hypomanic personalities. Interestingly, the results suggested that the brain activity involved in a lack of emotional regulation, may present as a marker for the development of BD. Hope this helps you :)

https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0165032713003546?casa_token=MqJYWwEx1YAAAAAA:FybO7-EdiPapINzdlvx5VALza5_32k4P-ZJn2fAwSGUQ6K4_hTWlC9zhAT6m3oexhsy6HpymXgQ U3210431 (discusscontribs) 01:20, 27 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Alec,

I'm eager to see what information you find on this topic and to see the final product of your chapter!

While I was looking for resources I could share with you to help you that you may have not found yourself, I stumbled across a textbook on bipolar disorder that could serve as a launchpad into a wide range of other references.

The textbook: Yatham, Lakshmi N.; Maj, Mario  (2010). Bipolar Disorder (Clinical and Neurobiological Foundations) || doi:10.1002/9780470661277 

I accessed the textbook for free through Sci-Hub but I believe a PDF can be borrowed through the library.

Good luck! :) Jdebear (discusscontribs) 05:19, 28 August 2022 (UTC)Reply


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