Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Green prescription motivation

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Good Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Promising 2-level heading structure that demonstrates a good initial understanding of the topic Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations I think it could help to more clearly distinguish between green prescription and green exercise. Although there is overlap, GP is a health professional's prescription, whereas green exercise is more casual (self-directed). Maybe contrast with the health effects of indoor/screen time. Overview - Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Perhaps a more relevant figure can be found; I'm not sure this shows green prescription? References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: full journal titles None Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic e.g., https://scholar.google.com/scholar?q=green+prescription+review Move non-peer-reviewed sources to External links Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Suggest focusing less on global health problems and more on the topic of the chapter - green prescription Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other nature-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Nature) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Summarise key findings rather than repeating detailed statistics Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored") [1] [2] The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[3] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) APA style Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions use the correct format Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Provide the full journal titles Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Use alphabetical order. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Focus on green prescription. Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:46, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also display and narrate the sub-title. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Focus questions are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow Audio communication is clear and well paced Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The final slide is only displayed very briefly Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. Excellent use of time codes. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:13, 8 November 2022 (UTC)