Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Fatigue and emotion

Suggestions for this chapter

Hello! Great book chapter, very in depth and looks like a lot of research has been done. I would suggest using hyperlinks in your page liking to relevant theories that you mention. I have done an example hyperlink in your page to show where you could possibly implement these. Hope this helps U3216389 (discuss • contribs) 05:54, 13 October 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Lewis.Kusk. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:56, 27 August 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly worded The capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents The capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence How to make and summarise social contributions is covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Promising development of basic key points for some sections, with relevant citations Room for greater depth It could be useful to clarify and draw a distinction between physical, cognitive, and emotional fatigue. Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A relevant figure is presented Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text References Very good italicisation Resources See also Good Also link to related book chapters Also link to related Wikipedia pages External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:56, 1 October 2022 (UTC)

feedback for book chapter

Hi there, great job on your book chapter. It has been well developed with great research and content. One suggestion that I will make so it is easier for your reader who has further curiosity is to implement hyperlinks or external sources (footnotes) throughout your writing. This will make it easier for individuals who need to do an external reading on a concept or need a description of a major idea within your topic.

However, everything looks and reads very well and easily. Keep up the good work :) U3216563 (discuss • contribs) 06:03, 16 October 2022 (UTC)

General feedback

Hey! great work so far you have such an interesting topic. I just noticed some formatting errors within your reference list, I would look to italicise names of journals by adding two apostrophes when source editing :) JaimeTegan (discuss • contribs) 06:34, 16 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem Over the maximum word count For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Explains the problem or phenomenon in a basic way Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained The workplace context for exploring the relationship between fatigue and emotion was helpful, up to a point. But also consider other everyday contexts for illustrating the relationship (e.g., parenting). Consider placing more emphasis on cognitive causes of fatigue Consider placing more emphasis on relatively straight forward interventions (e.g., use of non-directed attention, rest, sleep, exercise etc.) Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Excellent use of meta-analysis. Also consider the effect sizes. Greater emphasis on the fatigue-emotion relationship would be ideal. Research – Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Less emphasis on dealing with fatigue in general and more emphasis on the connection between fatigue and emotion would be ideal. Conclusion Reasonably good summary Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored") [1][2] Some sentences are overly long (e.g., the first sentence); consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas Use serial commas[4] – they are part of APA style and agenerally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Figures This figure was uploaded without permission of the copyright owner and has been nominated for deletion: File:A Motivation Control Theory of Fatigue.png Figure captions use the correct format Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) Good use of case studies or examples. What about following up with solutions? Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~15 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions towards the end of semester with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:46, 2 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Overview of topics provided; could be focus questions Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Use Australian spelling (e.g., behavior -> behaviour) Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent/very good/good/basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to Audio communication is clear and well paced Excellent conversational tone Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent/very good/good/basic The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access Licensing Images look like clipart, but their sources should nevertheless be acknowledged A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:32, 9 November 2022 (UTC)