Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Environmental grief

References

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Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter This chapter "beats around the bush" with general grief material before starting to directly tackle the target topic in the section titled "Place attachment theory" Obtaining topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided Much less detail is needed about grief in general as an emotional construct. Instead, summarise, and provide embedded link(s) to related book chapters. Reduce the historical emphasis; increase the contemporary emphasis Build more strongly on other nature-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Nature) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about eco-grief focused theory(ies) Too much depth is provided about general grief theories Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are mostly referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is reasonably well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Consider using topics rather than author names as headings Consider reducing the general grief heading structure and expanding the eco-grief heading structure Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Could provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions use the correct format Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being focused on eco-grief No use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Use bullet-points. Social contribution No logged social contributions

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Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent/very good/reasonably good/basic presentation Overall, this is an insufficient presentation Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it presents too much content visually and auditorily The presentation is under the maximum time limit The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic How does the Kübler-Ross model apply to environmental grief? "People" is often a better choice of word than "individuals" Excellent coverage of what can be done An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is not presented although the final slide about what can be done serves as a reasonable alternative Audio The audio content does a reasonably good job of addressing the topic The audio is easy to follow Good intonation The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides Check grammar/formatting for Kübler-Ross Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check and correct capitalisation for the first letter of the sub-title. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Excellent use of time codes Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

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