Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.
It seems like you may have created your own topic, instead of the topic you are signed up for, which is: Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Courage_motivation. So, I suggest moving the content to that page which has the correct page name, title, and sub-title.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Link provided to book chapter, but to incorrect page - adjust once content is moved to target page
Promising, well-focused, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. See Tutorial 01 for how to add sub-headings.
Note that creating your own topic has possibly lead to some conflation of courage, emotion, and emotion, whereas the original topic was to focus on a motivational view of courage. Emotion can be utilised to the extent that it helps to explain the motivational role of courage.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi!
Your chapter is looking really good! I can see you've already done most of it so I thought I could give a minor suggestion for polishing it off throughout the last week before it's due. You might consider adding in internal wiki links as an additional component of your chapter. For key words/concepts throughout the chapter's body of text, it would be helpful to link them to relevant book chapters or Wikipedia pages to help define them and provide further information.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi,
I can see you have done most of the work. I just want to give you a minor suggestion. I can see your content has a mixture of bold and paragraph, e.g., the overview is not bold but subheadings are in bold. You may consider making it look consistent and neat before the due day. I hope this help.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals".
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard (e.g., remove " ").
Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
APA style
Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Figures
Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example.
Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
Well done on creating and uploading your own images!
Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Very good use of feature box(es).
No use of quiz(zes).
Very good use of case studies or examples.
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Rename the links as per Tutorial 02.
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Display and narrate the correct title and sub-title to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter.
This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest.
A context for the topic is established.
Establish a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand.
Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.