Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Courage motivation

Social Contribution

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Hi! Your book chapter is looking like it's getting along really well, loving the plan! I was looking and found this really interesting article on courage and how it affects leadership! Hopefully, this helps you out a little! Link: Relationships between Authentic Leadership, Moral Courage, and ethical and Pro-Social Behaviors. U3213549 (discusscontribs) 05:34, 24 August 2022 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

 
  1. The title is incorrectly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is incorrectly worded and formatted
  3. It seems like you may have created your own topic, instead of the topic you are signed up for, which is: Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Courage_motivation. So, I suggest moving the content to that page which has the correct page name, title, and sub-title.
  1. Created
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter, but to incorrect page - adjust once content is moved to target page
  1. At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence - see social contribution
  2. Use a numbered list
  1. Promising, well-focused, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. See Tutorial 01 for how to add sub-headings.
  2. Note that creating your own topic has possibly lead to some conflation of courage, emotion, and emotion, whereas the original topic was to focus on a motivational view of courage. Emotion can be utilised to the extent that it helps to explain the motivational role of courage.
  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Avoid starting sentences with author names (unless particularly relevant) to help make the text more user-friendly.
  3. Use APA 7th ed. citation style (e.g., for 3 or more authors, use first author et al. from the outset)
  4. Overview - Consider:
    1. Emphasising a motivational perspective; deemphasising the primacy of an emotion perspective
    2. an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  5. There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider including more examples/case studies
  8. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
  1. Not included
  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
    2. Also link to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. OK
    2. Very good
    3. Rename links so that they are more user friendly - see Tutorial 01
    4. Include source in brackets after link - see Tutorial 01

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:41, 25 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Hi!

Your chapter is looking really good! I can see you've already done most of it so I thought I could give a minor suggestion for polishing it off throughout the last week before it's due. You might consider adding in internal wiki links as an additional component of your chapter. For key words/concepts throughout the chapter's body of text, it would be helpful to link them to relevant book chapters or Wikipedia pages to help define them and provide further information.

Best of luck for finishing off your chapter :)

U3213441 (discusscontribs) 06:10, 9 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Use of bold and paragraph

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Hi,

I can see you have done most of the work. I just want to give you a minor suggestion. I can see your content has a mixture of bold and paragraph, e.g., the overview is not bold but subheadings are in bold. You may consider making it look consistent and neat before the due day. I hope this help.

Good luck with everything Ajeofula22 (discusscontribs) 13:45, 11 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:23, 30 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Insufficient.
  2. Repeat of the table of contents has been removed.
  3. Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail.
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.
  5. Clear focus question(s).
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters).
  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts, but more could be added.
  3. Place more emphasis on explaining the underlying theoretical constructs than methods of measurement.
  1. Good overview of relevant research.
  2. Rather than focusing on methodology (e.g., measurement), focus on findings in relation to the focus questions.
  3. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  4. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Claims are referenced.
  1. Discussion of theory and research is quite well integrated.
  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
    4. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
    5. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
    6. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  2. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min).
  3. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard (e.g., remove " ").
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
  4. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words.
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    3. Figures
      1. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
      2. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example.
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
      4. Well done on creating and uploading your own images!
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[3]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
      4. Include hyperlinked dois
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Very good use of feature box(es).
  7. No use of quiz(zes).
  8. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  9. Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Rename the links as per Tutorial 02.
  1. ~4 image creation and uploads - well done!
  2. Other ~2 links were indirect.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:23, 30 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an reasonably good presentation.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes.
  1. Display and narrate the correct title and sub-title to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter.
  2. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest.
  3. A context for the topic is established.
  4. Establish a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand.
  5. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. Measurement is less interesting/useful than findings
  4. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little.
  5. The presentation is well structured.
  6. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory.
  7. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research.
  8. The presentation includes citations.
  9. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  10. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.
  1. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit.
  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. The narration is well polished.
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.
  1. The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  5. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:02, 6 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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