Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Compassion

Heading casing

Hi U3203545. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:57, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

Interactive component

Hi, You have the beginnings of a wonderful chapter. I can see how much work you have put in. One way you can make your chapter a bit more interactive is by adding a quiz at the end of a section, rather than a summary.

Keep writing! U3216256 (discuss • contribs) 23:08, 26 September 2022 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hi there, your chapter looks fantastic! One question I had is about your definition - you credit Richard Lazarus and Jennifer Goetz, but they don't appear in your reference list, and your in-text citation is Nussbaum. I'm not sure if you ended up changing direction here and just haven't finished editing, but for such a central concept, it would be good to have a primary source citation. You could look at Lazarus, R. (1991). Emotion and adaptation. New York: Oxford University Press or Goetz, J. L., Keltner, D., & Simon-Thomas, E. (2010). Compassion: an evolutionary analysis and empirical review. Psychological bulletin, 136(3), 351–374. https://doi.org/10.1037/a0018807. Or if the definition you've used is Nussbaum's, maybe delete the Lazarus/Goetz note since they're not referred to again and their significance is unclear? I'm really nitpicking, though, you've done an amazing job! U3141987 (discuss • contribs) 10:31, 14 October 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s), but unable to view Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of examples/case studies. Note that it is possible to make in-page links to the case studies. See: https://helpwiki.evergreen.edu/wiki/index.php/Anchors_-_Mediawiki Check Australian spelling (e.g., energize -> energise) Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Underway The challenge will probably be covering this in 4000 words, but it looks like you're well aware of that. Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Excellent Resources See also Excellent Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:41, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained The self-compassion theory seems to contain broader (non-self) compassion factors? The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Build more strongly on other compassion-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Compassion) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts (e.g., a case study in which someone is successfully compassionate?) Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Measurement tool detail is over-emphasised Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored") [1][2] Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Tables are referred to using APA style Citations use correct APA style References use correct APA style Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Very good use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Very good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~10 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed. Also display and narrate the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A context for the topic is established Focus questions are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion An auditory conclusion is provided The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with the take-home messages Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is clear and well paced Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well polished Audio recording quality was very good Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides he font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:16, 7 November 2022 (UTC)