Is it worth exploring more brain chemicals than just dopamine or possibly comparing brain chemical alteration between cannabis and other substances such as nicotine or alcohol. - U3216502
Hello, great work on the chapter so far! I thought it might be worth me suggesting you look further into how cannabis is used medically as you mention in the brief history section that cannabis is predominantly smoked medically. I have a relative who is prescribed cannabis for medical use and the delivery of this medication doesn't involve smoking. I am not aware of medical treatment involving smoking cannabis. That being said, I haven't done empirical research into this but I thought it could be worth my suggesting some further clarification in this section. You could use discussion surrounding self-medication vs clinical medication to explore this clarification because self-medicating with cannabis does usually involve smoking. Hope this helps :) --Sophia246 (discuss • contribs) 10:08, 23 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
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Consider linking to your professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with link(s) to evidence
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Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development to limit the emphasis on background information and expand the focus on the target topic
The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings
Concentrate less on background info and more on the relationship between cannabis and dopmamine
Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
Overview - Consider adding:
an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered
focus questions
an image
an example or case study
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Significantly increase the cannabis and dopamine section
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
Hasn't been developed
What might the take-home, practical messages be?
In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
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Hi! here is a great resource for understanding dopamine and the reward system https://neuroscientificallychallenged.com/posts/know-your-brain-reward-system
Section 2 of this journal article provides a great overview of the anatomy of motivation and has the bonus of being a scientific source! https://doi.org/10.1016/j.pbb.2013.06.011 U3162201 (discuss • contribs) 01:19, 4 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
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Hi there, I enjoyed reading your chapter it was quite engaging. Have you had a look into naturally occurring cannabinoids that humans produce in comparison to those in cannabis. It would be interesting to compare the effects each of these have on someone. U3216963 (discuss • contribs) 16:22, 17 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
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The sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the index of topics.
Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
The material up to the section called "Theory behind the motivation of cannabis use" is useful and relevant to the topic; but after that the material was irrelevant to the topic and wsa ignored for marking purposes (I searched for e.g., "dopamine" but it didn't appear again until the Conclusion).
Well over the maximum word count. References are ignored for marking purposes.
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There is too much general theoretical material from about half-way through the chapter. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes). No mention of dopamine.
No use of case studies or examples
Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Be more selective.
Good use of external links in the "External links" section. Be more selective (focus on cannabis and dopamine).
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A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s)
Unclear how the best available research about the cannabis/dopamine relationship leads to the hard-line recommendation to treat cannabis in similar ways to hard drugs
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages about the cannabis/dopamine relationship
The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.