Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Beneficence as a psychological need

User:SLoCE

Adjusted all your references to adhere to the APA7 style. The style guide for journal articles is free online if you google it. Good luck.

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Right idea with summarising and recoding, but the edit removed a lot of content and has been reverted. See https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2021/Cognitive_dissonance_and_motivation&action=history for more details. Use a numbered list Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Consider briefly explaining what a psychological need is, and providing embedded link(s) to related chapter(s) Include the argument(s) for and against the inclusion of beneficence as a basic psychological need; there should be plenty of material about this. This could replace, for example, the use of more general theory such as Maslow's hierarchy of needs. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study move detailed info into subsequent sections Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about other psychological needs according to SDT). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Promising balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Kants' -> Kant's Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed User name removed (authorship is as per page's editing history) Social contributions moved to user page Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation full journal name doi formatting (make links active) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:36, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem Well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4000 words has been ignored for marking purposes (i.e., from the end of the Conclusion). Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Too wordy; an alternative would be to provide a simple description of beneficence with a compelling example Basic focus question(s). The first question doesn't directly relate to the topic. Theory – Breadth Sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided A simple description of beneficence with an example would be helpful There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about psychological needs, SDT etc.). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). It is unclear why there is a focus on health professionals. This could be useful for a case study, but this focus is not specified by the title/sub-title. Greater emphasis on psychological aspects of beneficence (as opposed to philosophical aspects) would be helpful Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration There is basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') [1] Check and correct use of affect vs. effect APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions use the correct format Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Remove bold. Include sources in parentheses. Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence This edit removed a lot of content and was reverted

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:28, 5 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A context for the topic is established Some focus questions are presented; some of the other types could be rephrased as questions Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no explicit use of relevant psychological research (some is implied) The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is very briefly presented with take-home message(s) The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow Good intonation The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was very good Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes effective/good/basic use of text and image based slides, with web-cam Perhaps it would work better to show the slides continuously, with web-cam in a corner? The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:03, 12 November 2022 (UTC)