Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Antidepressants and motivation

SSRIs

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It might be helpful to discuss SSRIs. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:27, 17 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it does not directly and adequately address the topic using the best available psychological theory and research.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic
  2. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic
  3. No need for general descriptions of motivation and emotion. Instead, cut to the chase.
  4. No need to refer to the book chapter. Instead, cut to the chase.
  5. Avoid referring to "next slide". Instead, just move to it and continue the narrative.
  6. The presentation starts to address the topic ~1 min.
  7. The motivation theories are too general. Cover theoretical perspectives that are directly related to explaining the relationship between ADs and motivation.
  8. No need to cover side-effects of ADs unless they relate to motivation
  9. Include citations to support claims
  10. The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological theory
  11. The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological research
  12. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studiesn
  1. A Conclusion fails to provide appropriate take-home message(s). It focuses on suicidality rather than providing practical, take-home messages in response to focus questions derived from the sub-title.
  2. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  1. The presentation makes basic use of audio
  2. Basic intonation
  3. The narrated content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic
  2. The presentation makes effective/good/basic use of animated slides
  3. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication is supplemented in a very basic way by images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
  7. The visual content is poorly matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A written description of the presentation is not provided
  3. A link to the book chapter is not provided
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:52, 11 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:24, 16 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because it does not adequately address the topic: What are the effects of ADs on motivation. The material is mostly about depression, motivation, and ADs as separate concepts. Most of this could be removed and replaced with a more targetted focus on theory and research about the the effects of ADs on motivation.
  2. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations
  3. Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section
  4. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Basic Overview
  2. This Overview lacks precision (i.e., laser-focus on the topic - what are the effects of ADs on motivation)
  3. Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest
  5. Basic focus question(s). Combine first two questions. Unpack the third question.
  1. Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic. The theory presented hovers around the topic but not about the topic (big difference). Drill into the theory about how/why ADs might impact on motivation.
  2. How does incentive theory and competence theory help to understand the relationship between ADs and motivation?
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
  1. Insufficient depth is provided about theory which explains the relationship between ADs and motivation
  2. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts
  1. Insufficient use of relevant psychological research about the effects of ADs on motivation
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful
  1. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research
  1. Insufficient summary of the best available theory and research about the relationship between ADs and motivation
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
  4. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
    2. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
    3. Figures
      1. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Check and correct placement of full-stops
      2. Do not include author first name or initials
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
      4. Move Wikipedia sources to the see also section
      5. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient
  2. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Citations and links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section
  5. Good use of image(s). Make some of the images smaller.
  6. No use of table(s)
  7. Basic use of feature box(es)
  8. Basic use of quiz(zes). The quizzes could be more effective by being about the relationship between ADs and motivation.
  9. Basic use of case studies or examples. The case study could be more effective by being about the relationship between ADs and motivation.
  10. Poor use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. I've removed the generic links. Move external links to the external links section.
  11. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
  1. No logged social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:24, 16 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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