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The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it does not directly and adequately address the topic using the best available psychological theory and research.
The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic
The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic
No need for general descriptions of motivation and emotion. Instead, cut to the chase.
No need to refer to the book chapter. Instead, cut to the chase.
Avoid referring to "next slide". Instead, just move to it and continue the narrative.
The presentation starts to address the topic ~1 min.
The motivation theories are too general. Cover theoretical perspectives that are directly related to explaining the relationship between ADs and motivation.
No need to cover side-effects of ADs unless they relate to motivation
Include citations to support claims
The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological theory
The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological research
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studiesn
A Conclusion fails to provide appropriate take-home message(s). It focuses on suicidality rather than providing practical, take-home messages in response to focus questions derived from the sub-title.
The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A written description of the presentation is not provided
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because it does not adequately address the topic: What are the effects of ADs on motivation. The material is mostly about depression, motivation, and ADs as separate concepts. Most of this could be removed and replaced with a more targetted focus on theory and research about the the effects of ADs on motivation.
Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations
Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section
Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic. The theory presented hovers around the topic but not about the topic (big difference). Drill into the theory about how/why ADs might impact on motivation.
How does incentive theory and competence theory help to understand the relationship between ADs and motivation?
Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Spelling
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
Remove unnecessary capitalisation
Figures
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
Check and correct placement of full-stops
Do not include author first name or initials
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Citations and links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section
Good use of image(s). Make some of the images smaller.
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes). The quizzes could be more effective by being about the relationship between ADs and motivation.
Basic use of case studies or examples. The case study could be more effective by being about the relationship between ADs and motivation.
Poor use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. I've removed the generic links. Move external links to the external links section.
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section