Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/What the hell effect

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Hi there, I really enjoyed reading your points on the what the hell effect, it is such an interesting phenomenon and I was surprised that I'd never heard of it before! Can't wait to read your full book chapter. I thought it might be useful to add some more interactive features to your chapter. I have found the quizzes to be a really useful tool and have provided the quiz format below. Nice work and good luck!

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{Question: |type="()"} - True + False U3187813 (discuss • contribs) 05:38, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

This is so helpful! I deleted the quiz feature and have been trying to add it back but I kept messing up the code thank you sm! Gracehowie (discuss • contribs) 23:56, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi! I love this chapter, maybe it is a little TOO relatable for me haha! I really enjoy the Youtube videos you have included. They make it extremely interactive and work as an interesting way to learn the topic.

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Great to see you on Twitter! Wikiversity contributions summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure - perhaps could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Good use of questions as headings The section "What are some directions for future research?" isn't needed - but could be included. The key is to provide an integrated overview of relevant psychological theory and research, with practical applications. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Main suggestion is to further develop the motivational theory and research Overview: Excellent use of opening scenario good description of the problem and what will be covered, including focus questions consider adding an image Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words Consider including more non-eating examples/case studies (e.g., alcohol, gambling) Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent - one of the best explanatory captions for an image I've seen Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:36, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Gracehowie. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:20, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Thank you!! I'll fix that now :)) Gracehowie (discuss • contribs) 00:14, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi there!

What an interesting and relatable topic! I particularly enjoyed reading your points on how we can prevent the WTHE from occuring. Nevertheless, I do have some points which I hope help as you finish it off. Firstly, it is extremely important to acknowledge your sources. Doing so will make your work read more clearly, and help you avoid the consequences of plagarism. For example, in the origin paragraph, your opening sentence could instead be: The seminal study in relation to the WTHE was conducted by Polivy et al. (2010). Additionally, the shorter sentence is easier to read, and will help your work flow. Secondly, it is important to introduce your acronym. Here is a link to the APA 7th editions abbreviation guide - https://apastyle.apa.org/instructional-aids/abbreviations-guide.pdf . Secondly, you may want to review your use of quotation marks - https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/italics-quotations/quotation-marks . I hope these points help, and all the best with the rest of the semester!

U3202904 (discuss • contribs) 09:35, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Hey! Thank you so much for the feedback! Fear not though, my chapter is far from done (especially the referencing lol) and I will definitely be correcting all of these pointers today. Gracehowie (discuss • contribs) 23:54, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Italics and Figures

Hi Grace, This is looking really well developed. I would suggest adding captions for all your figures. It will help to link the images to the material. Also, it looks like you need to put italicise your ref list. this can be done through edit source. I hope this helps, Great work!

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2021/What_the_hell_effect&action=history[ these copyedits]. Overview Well developed Overview. Excellent example. Add image. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Include more motivational theory. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Excellent focus questions. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links). Theory — Depth Reasonable depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). The goal reframing section is very good. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about research is evident. However, some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Also emphasise acquisitional goal reframing. A take-away message is provided. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Grammar is excellent. Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., WTHE), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables The image for Figure 3 has been deleted. APA style is used for Figure captions. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Figures are well captioned. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~17 logged, useful, minor to moderatef social contributions across two platforms About half of the social contributions had direct links to evidence. These were counted for marking purposes.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:22, 11 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented briefly. Also narrate the title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest . A context for the topic is established. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data Use the correct chapter title and sub-title as the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:40, 20 November 2021 (UTC)