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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Citations should not include author initials (APA style)
Some of the sentences may be plagiarised
Overview - Consider adding:
a description of the problem
focus questions based on the sub-title
an image
an example or case study
For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
Basic development of key points for each section
Currently, there is insufficient coverage of relevant psychological theory and research
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
underway
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
I recommend using the Studiosity service to help improve the quality of written expression because there are a lot of awkward expression and grammatical errors.
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Hey, I am someone who loves to-do lists, something about checking off tasks feels great haha. Anyway I found this article that was really interesting, it joined the efficacy of to-do lists to help with people who cant sleep due to anxiety. They found that to-do lists really helped with over worrying. As someone who also over worries sometimes, I might implement the reading into my own life.
https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC5758411/
--U3202984 (discuss • contribs) 12:22, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Hi! I love making up to-do lists so I found your topic quite interesting. I would suggest including the different ways they can be created (such as on paper, and recently on apps such as notion, Microsoft to-do etc.) Linking the recent switch to online methods, I would be curious to see if there are any differences in motivation when listing on paper vs electronically?
Good luck!
Rani
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Hello, I liked reading about your topic as I find to-do lists help reduce anxiety for myself, although sometimes I spend way too much time making them. One suggestion I had was in regards to your reference list, for journal articles, the journal publisher needs to be italicised and capitalised, furthermore if you cannot find a doi you should still include a link to the website. Overall good read. (Lewis.Kusk (discuss • contribs) = Lewis.Kusk)
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An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. Also narrate the title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio.
Audio communication is clear and well paced.
Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
Audio recording quality was good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard/mouse clicks audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The presentation uses an accurate combination of the chapter title and sub-title within the maximum 100-character limit for YouTube videos.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
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Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic.
There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Layout
Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional bold).
Provide more descriptive headings.
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
Grammar
The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient.
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
No use of feature box(es).
No use of quiz(zes).
No use of case studies or examples.
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section.
Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
Overall, minor improvements have been made. However, this chapter remains insufficient.
The chapter is still well under the maximum word count.
Some embedded links have been added.
Some of the grammatical and spelling errors have been corrected.
Some minor rewriting has occurred.
Some additional citations have been added.
APA style is not consistently used for citations. For example, when there are three of more authors, cite the first author's surname followed by et al. and the year.
Some general motivation and goal-setting theory has been added.