Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Synthetic cannabinoids and emotion

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Heading casing

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Hi Ta3231485. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:26, 20 August 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey!! I just wanted to suggest adding a bit more to your conclusion. Making it more direct to your body paragraphs and answering the points raised will make it flow a bit better. Good luck!! MargaretMinikin 13/10/21 4:03


Topic development feedback

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edit source] from the end of the headings
  1. Remove quotes and citations from headings
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  1. Created - minimal, but sufficient
  2. Very brief description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Add link to book chapter
  1. Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.
  2. Many of the contributions used incorrect capitalisation. Titles and sub-titles should use sentence casing as listed on this page: Motivation and emotion/Book/2021.
  1. Overly complicated 2-level structure - consider simplifying.
  2. Remove colons and [edit
  1. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  3. Use APA style 7th edition for citations (e.g., remove italics).
  4. There appears to be overly heavily reliance on a single source (Soussan et al., 2014).
  5. There appears to be reasonable coverage of research.
  6. Expand coverage of theory.
  7. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  8. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  9. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  10. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words.
  11. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info
  12. Strive for balanced, objective reporting. If all the emotional effects are aversive why do people use synthetic cannabinoids? Are there any positive emotional effects that users report?
  13. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. promising
  1. A figure is presented.
  2. Caption should include Figure X. ...
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  5. Consider decreasing image size from default.
  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. Remove bullet-points
    2. capitalisation
    3. italicisation
    4. doi formatting
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Use sentence casing for link title
    3. Move Wikipedia link to See also

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:33, 5 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

linking

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Hello, i linked a few concepts in the chapter to make it a bit more interactive :) --Brianna Meddemmen (discusscontribs) 12:48, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Well developed Overview.
  2. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon.
  3. Clear focus question(s).
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.
  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.
  1. Excellent critical thinking about research is evident.
  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.
  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format.# Layout
    3. Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold).
    4. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  2. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
  3. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
  4. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
      1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
      2. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
      3. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
      4. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
      4. Include hyperlinked dois
      5. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
  2. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s).
  5. Excellent use of table(s).
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  7. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of quiz(zes).
  8. Promising use of quiz(zes). 3 useful questions included. Use wiki format for quizzes. See Help:Quiz.
  1. ~9 logged, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.
  2. Unfortunately several edits (capitalising chapter page titles) did not use the desired style for the book chapters.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:31, 11 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation.
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented (also narrated the title and sub-title) - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A context for the topic is established.
  3. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic.
  4. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  5. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content.
  6. The presentation is well structured.
  7. The presentation is poorly structured.
  8. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic.
  9. The selection of content is problematic because it doesn't directly address the topic.
  10. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  11. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research.
  12. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  13. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s).
  2. The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question).
  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Very good intonation and articulation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Audio recording quality was good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard/mouse clicks audible). Consider using an external microphone.
  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic but effective.
  2. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools.
  7. Trim the last bit of footage after the Conclusion.
  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation.
  2. This presentation may have probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:44, 20 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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