Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Survival needs and motivation

Case study suggestion

When I read your book chapter title, my immediate thought was 'Bear Grylls'. I noticed you currently do not have a case study selection, perhaps Bear Grylls could represent the biological needs of survival in your book chapter.--U3039010 (discuss • contribs) 13:27, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

I will also share that Bear Grylls is a British adventurer, who is well known for his wildlife survival skills in extreme environmental conditions. Bear Grylls also explains the importance of survival as well as the order of priority (water, food, shelter etc) that is needed to survive in that type of environment. — Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])

Hi! Your topic so far is really interesting! I noticed that your case study was on Yenomi Park and I watched a video the other day where she was speaking about her experiences! I'll attach it in case you'd like to include it on your page! good luck: TedX Yenomi Park--U3198955 (discuss • contribs) 12:22, 17 October 2021 (UTC)U3198955

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:30, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Overview was missing Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development There is no need to cover social needs - this is not the focus of the chapter; can link to other chapters about such topics Key points Basic development of key points for some sections Consider models of needs which have simplified Maslow's hierarchy such as Alderfer's ERG theory For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Strive to balance and integrate theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Add an APA style caption which starts with Figure X. ... Caption should better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider decreasing image size References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Very good Only link to chapters which are directly related to the current chapter Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Only link to resources which are directly related to the current chapter Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:30, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The chapter is basically a summary of Maslow's hierarchy of needs. However, the topic is meant to be: "What are survival needs and how do they influence motivation?". Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. The case study could be simplified to more clearly illustrate survival needs motivation. The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title). Theory — Breadth Theoretical coverage is too broad. Focus more narrowly on survival needs motivation. Insufficient focus on psychological theory about survival needs. Build more strongly on other needs-related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Needs). Theory — Depth Insufficient depth of relevant psychological theory. One long case study is used, but it is unclear how it illustrates key principles of psychological theory about survival needs motivation. The focus of this single case study seems to be more about the narrative and person than on the psychological principles involved. Research — Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research about survival needs motivation. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Insufficient integration of theory and research about survival needs motivation. Conclusion Insufficient summary of the best available psychological knowledge about survival needs motivation theory and research. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold). See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures and tables Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Basic use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:36, 12 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Overview The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Good use of intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was OK. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., background noise). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Mostly the font size is sufficiently large to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are not used in the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:41, 15 November 2021 (UTC)