Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Serial killer couples

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Hey Eilish! Your chapter is super interesting well done! Hope you don't mind I just made a few grammatical corrections with commas and apostrophes :) --Gracehowie (discuss • contribs) 11:30, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi! This is a really interesting topic, I was looking a found an article discussing serial killer motivation! Its a bit broad but I feel that it would apply well to your topic! Good luck! Link:https://d1wqtxts1xzle7.cloudfront.net/50998528/j.1556-4029.2006.00168.x20161221-18041-t6qm5q-with-cover-page-v2.pdf?Expires=1629956361&Signature=Y7wC9VgFjCG0BIqvifYZB-GS374P9rT4TrdV68BfPCkLOwQnu7aqpVjqWfeIqP~oxjuS1sHvKiJhgTyjKBIo0GLiXe1CVzrpxhFkmU3-HwasiCuKq7FE9Tx66AHY03jtLtxXRLYr07XeVG0F5FK-fgI1N6S0eJbd2MGPsBdIUmKxPAd4dl9atRSxM5paolRayiQ2xTJvuc7kA4DKoieOh-mDkUxb1ID5JcJFsc7vO98K~gv8vU2otvXZK24rHtqL~kK5BY96vXJakD6bmcIuxvnDvsIDr36Jj88-Gq~ukq4QqjBJlx342uSVRyVF9aTH-zKSJiAKwhDHQNmK~NrEZw__&Key-Pair-Id=APKAJLOHF5GGSLRBV4ZA --U3204694 (discuss • contribs) 10:21, 30 September 2021 (UTC)

Hello! I found your topic on the list and found it very fascinating! I found an article titled "The Myth of Virginity: The Case of a Franco-Belgian Serial Killer", which refers to a famous French serial killer husband and wife couple. I thought this article would be useful towards your research as it states their motivating factor and the type of serial killer they were in depth. Hope this helps towards developing this fascinating topic! The DOI for the article is: https://doi.org/10.1111/j.1556-4029.2011.01795.x. Good luck! -U3127020 26 August, 2021.

Hi, I found this article which discusses 'couple' or 'team' serial killers. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.avb.2013.11.002 Another interesting murderous couple from Australia are David and Catherine Birnie who murdered four women in WA in the 80's if you need any examples or case studies for your chapter! --U3194769 (discuss • contribs) 06:45, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

Hey! I found this article that could be relevant analysing serial killer couples and particularly the factors influencing the females' participation in this dynamic. Morgan, J. L. (2010). Killing for love: evaluating the female's participation in male-female serial killer teams: an honors thesis (HONRS 499). --BenRoss068 (discuss • contribs) 04:12, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

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Title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Under-developed, 3-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps expand the number of headings but simplify to a 2-level structure. The focus should be on serial killer couples, so consider refocusing or removing the "Understanding serial killers" and just providing a brief summary with links to the dedicated chapter(s) about this topic. Expand the heading structure for content that directly addresses the topic (i.e., the sub-title). Key points Overview - Consider: remove template material probably there is already too much content in the Overview - consider providing a simpler description of the problem and what will be covered - and moving some of the detail into subsequent sections focus questions - #1 shouldn't be a focus of this chapter (instead, summarise and link to other chapter(s) about this topic). adding an image adding an example or case study It is unclear what psychological theory and research will be used to address the topic. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion (the most important section): under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? Figure A figure is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation doi formatting Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic. Resources See also Very good Present in alphabetical order. External links Excellent

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The main areas for potential improvement are: Expand use of psychological theory and research, including citations to support claims. Abbreviate the case studies. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. No mention of motivational theory or research to justify the 1st focus question. No mention of relationship between SKCs to justify the 2nd focus question. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Case studies are overused. Abbreviate them or be more selective about which ones to use to illustrate key points about motivational theory and research related to the topic. Theory — Depth Limited depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Examples are used to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). What type of research did Hickey (2010) do? Explain, to help the reader to decide how reliable and valid the findings are. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration To the extent to which it is provided, discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Basic summary. Importance of topic well explained. General synthesis of key points about psychological or motivational theory or research. Could be expanded with more detail. What are the practical, take-home message(s)? Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. horrible) in science-based communication. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Direct quotes are overused. They don't indicate anything about the author's understanding of the topic. It is far more impressive to express ideas in your own words. Layout Consider providing more descriptive section headings. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author initials. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Promising use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Ideally, also link to articles about related psychological concepts. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related forensic book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One image. No use of table(s). One feature box. Two quiz questions. A lot of case study material is used. These could be shifted into a sub-page and abbreviated on the main page. Social contribution ~6 logged, mostly last minute social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Overview The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes good use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:49, 15 November 2021 (UTC)