Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Self-schemas and motivation

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:28, 14 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 
  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. Wording of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Basic heading development
  4. The main recommended area for improvement is focus less on background concepts (such as what are schemas) and to expand the heading structure around this chapter's topic (relationship between self-schemas and motivation)
  1. Overview - Suggestions:
    1. add a description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. focus the focus questions more closely as the topic (i.e., around the sub-title)
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  2. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  3. Good balance of theory and research
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts.
  5. Promising use of examples/case studies
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?
  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption uses APA style
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting (hyperlinks should be clickable)
    4. separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:28, 14 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Article suggestions

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Hi, I found your topic very interesting! I think it's cool that you're doing a topic that relates to students like us. On that note, I found an article by Ng and Renshaw (2002) that might help the development of your book chapter :) -- U3201030 (discusscontribs) 05:41, 16 October 2021 (UTC) -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:42, 20 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a good to very good presentation.
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest.
  3. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s).
  1. The audio is interesting to listen to.
  2. Audio communication is clear.
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  4. The amount of text presented on some slides makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The amount of text presented on some slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time.
  6. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.
  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:12, 21 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Solid Overview.
  2. Explain the phenomenon more clearly.
  3. Clear focus question(s).
  4. The focus questions are OK, but could be more closely aligned with the sub-title.
  5. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.
  1. There is too much general theoretical material. Summarise schemas more briefly and concentrate on the relationship between self-schemas and motivation.
  2. Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided.
  3. Build more strongly on other self-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self).
  1. Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.
  3. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.
  4. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  1. Basic overview of relevant research.
  2. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory.
  1. Basic summary.
  2. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest.
  3. Add practical, take-home message(s).
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
  2. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned.
      2. Figure captions use the correct format.
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Check and correct placement of full-stops.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
      2. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      3. Check and correct use of italicisation
      4. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good.
  2. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Basic use of feature box(es).
  7. No use of quiz(zes).
  8. Good use of case studies or examples.
  9. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  10. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section.
  1. ~2 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:57, 23 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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