Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Self-regulation

Heading casing

Hi Kalanyay. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:38, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title Excellent Very good Good OK Capitalisation of the title and sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Author details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Excellent - used effectively Created - minimal Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Headings Basic structure. It makes sense to use the three questions from the sub-title as top-level headings, but develop further (e.g., sub-headings within those main sections). Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Overall, key points are well developed. Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Overview - Consider adding: question marks for focus questions (grammar) an image an example or case study Write using 3rd person perspective. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., use FirstAuthor et al., year). Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words. Promising case study - make sure to emphasise the practical, take-home messages. Promising use of theory and research. Figure A figure is presented. Caption uses APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation doi formatting Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:38, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The main areas for potential improvement are: Review a wider range of psychological theory and research. Provide more independently written materials. Use fewer direct quotes. Provide more examples. Well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. It is unclear why the chapter focuses on self-efficacy and social cognitive theory in relation to self-regulation. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic. The chapter presents an overly specific focus on self-regulation through a social cognitive theory / self-efficacy lens. However, this seems to be overly narrow and lacking a big picture overview. Build more strongly on other self-regulation-related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self-regulation). Theory — Depth Insufficient depth of coverage of different theoretical perspectives about self-regulation. Social cognitive theory / self-efficacy is covered in some depth. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research. Lack of breadth. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of what the best available psychological theory and research has to say about the topic of self-regulation. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills. Direct quotes are overused. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Underdeveloped. More descriptive and integrative headings needed. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. APA style Check and correct APA style for presenting and citing sources for direct quotes, including providing page numbers. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Table captions should use APA style. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Figure captions use the correct format. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Basic use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:36, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. I think by "efficiency" you probably mean "efficacy" - there is an important difference. There is too much content - the presentation goes over time. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of one relevant psychological research study. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. The presentation does not provide practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The audio is hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech (e.g., efficiency -> efficacy). The audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was good. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:47, 15 November 2021 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission

1. These changes were reviewed.
2. The chapter is now over the word count, so not all of the added content has been considered for marking purposes.
3. Overview - some expansion and improvement.
4. Theory
   1. Substantial additional SR theoretical content is added.
   2. Overall, too much is added because the chapter is now over the maximum word count. Be more focused and selective.
   3. I think you might mean "learning self-regulation" rather than "learned self-regulation"?
5. Research
   1. The review of relevant research has been significantly improved.
6. Overview
   1. This section has been substantially increased, but is too long and is largely ignored for marking purposes due to the chapter being over the maximum word count.
7. Written expression
   1. Style
      1. Where grammar was fixed, not all of the tags were removed.
      2. There are many new grammatical errors (e.g., see tags).
      3. Direct quotes should be embedded into sentences rather than dumped.
      4. Direct quotes should use APA style.
      5. Direct quotes are overused. It is better to express ideas using your own words. Direct quotes have been largely ignored for marking purposes.
      6. Avoid one sentence paragraphs (aim for 3 to 5 sentences).
      7. Use Australian spelling (e.g., recognize -> recognise).
      8. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., "It is regulated through cognition, and Motivation").
      9. Check and correct use of that vs. who.
      10. The References have been expanded.
   2. Learning features
      1. Several images have been added. APA style captions are not provided. Figures are not referred to in the text.
      2. See also has been substantially expanded.
      3. External links have been expanded.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:48, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation resubmission feedback

1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
2. A basic Overview is provided. No focus questions are presented.
3. Overall, too much detailed content is presented. Consider slowing down and summarising.
4. Some slides contain too much text to easily read while listening.
5. The audio is quite fast. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences.
6. There is some audio distortion - the microphone might be too close?
7. Consider using greater intonation to increase interest to listener.
8. The presentation has a correct title and sub-title.
9. A brief description is provided.
10. A link to the book chapter is provided.
11. A copyright license is provided, but not in the meta-data field for licensing.
12. There is no acknowledgement of image sources - copyright may have been violated.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:02, 6 December 2021 (UTC)