Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Safety as a psychological need

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed and narrated. Also display and narrate the sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation addresses the topic. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research. Include citations. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a very basic take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. No written description of the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided within the maximum time limit. Present details in the description instead. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:11, 23 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. The chapter is well over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Empty Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are selected, described, and explained. There is too much detail, especially detail which is not directly related to safety as psychological need. Build more strongly on other needs-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Needs). Theory — Depth Excessive theoretical depth is provided. Be more selective and focused on how the content directly relates to the topic. An Overview with focus questions could help to structure and discipline the chapter. Did you consult Maslow (1943)? If not, this should be cited as a secondary source. More examples of safety as a psychological need could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. Less detail about research which isn't directly related to safety as a psychological need and more more detail about research which is directly related to safety as a psychological need would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Insufficient integration of theory and research about safety as a psychological need. Conclusion Very good summary, on topic. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.). APA style Direct quotes need page numbers — even better, write in your own words. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures Figures are well captioned. Figure 3 has a lot of wide space; crop and re-upload. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Some references are incomplete. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). No use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies or examples. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. No use of external links in the "External links" section. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:26, 24 November 2021 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hello,

I read your book chapter and found the topic to be quite interesting, however, I have a couple suggestions in case you wanted to improve it. Your references should include a doi or link to the website you obtained them, you should also italicise and capitalise the name of the journals (for example, "American Psychologist"), you should also have a look at what words are capitalised in your titles as they should generally have only the first word capitalised for most of them. Another thing which I did that you could elaborate on is adding external links in case the reader would like to do some extra reading.

Overall was a good read.

(~~~ = Lewis.Kusk) Lewis.Kusk (discuss • contribs) 02:11, 16 October 2022 (UTC)