Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Psychedelic treatment of depression

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Hey hey,

So I had actually considered doing this exact topic! Did a little bit of research on it but ended up choosing something else. Here's a link to a relatively recent presentation by one of the researchers who's at the forefront of the latest research on this stuff.

https://youtu.be/qdpuJZZZYV0

Obviously its just a youtube presentation so it can't be cited but the guy has authored a whole heap of articles out there you can use if you search his name. I found this to be a really helpful, thoroughly explained, and easily digestible overview when I was looking into it. Might be useful for structuring how this topic can be best tackled.

Good luck with it! --Julesrc12 (discuss • contribs) 01:26, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey,

After listening to a lot of Joe Rogan podcasts and reading about how LSD has been shown to decrease alcoholism, I have become increasingly fascinated with psychedelic use. I found this article that I think you could potentially use as it explores how psilocybin can be used for mental health called "Clinical potential of psilocybin as a treatment for mental health condition" (Daniel & Haberman, 2018) and it is also government approved so its definitely reliable. I have provided the reference below.

Daniel, J., & Haberman, M. (2018). Clinical potential of psilocybin as a treatment for mental health conditions. The mental health clinician, 7(1), 24–28. https://doi.org/10.9740/mhc.2017.01.024

Good luck! -- User:U3203073 29/08/21

Hey, To add indents for your reference list go into edit source and add a reference template

--Ashley Sanders01 (discuss • contribs) 01:18, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Headings and Social Contributions

Hi Margaret, Just a friendly reminder about incorrectly capitalising your headings: e.g. How can psychedelics be used to treat depression? Instead of: How can Psychedelics be used to treat Depression? Also, just be mindful about capitalising other students book chapter headings incorrectly for your social contributions :) --U3205964 (discuss • contribs) 09:12, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Image size

Hello, I hope you don't mind but I increased the image sizes for images that weren't readable at the current size they were --Brianna Meddemmen (discuss • contribs) 13:19, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:59, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

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Title Title and sub-title are correct; formatting corrected User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided - consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence Headings Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure See earlier comment about Heading casing Keep the chapter focused on the target topic (e.g., there is no need for a separate section about "What is emotion?". Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Promising development of key points for some sections, with relevant citations Overview - Looks promising. Consider adding: an image an example or case study For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Abbreviate info about specific psychedelics - embed links to Wikipedia articles and/or Wikiversity book chapters with more info. Concentrate the chapter on addressing the sub-title question. Same with the section defining emotion and even depression. The most useful section is likely to be "How can psychedelics be used to treat depression?" Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A figure is not presented Caption should include Figure X. ... (note italics) Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting (links should be clickable) Resources See also Very good Be more selective e.g., a better link than emotion would be to depression Use bullet-points External links Good Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:59, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Final suggestion

Hi there! To simplify the look of your chapter you may want to consider inserting the link of your external links into the title of the youtube video, just like you have done with the depression link from the American Psychiatric Association. This would help with the tidiness of your chapter and ease of reading. Hope this helps and good luck! --CharliU3203035 (discuss • contribs) 08:54, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:37, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. The title is narrated. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Check and correct for spelling errors (e.g., use Australian spelling, trails -> trials etc.). Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). The entire Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Consider using shorter sentences. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was good. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Hide the audio icon. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. The description incorrectly states that the video was published on 31st Nov, 2021. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources are communicated. Links to three images sources are not provided. The licenses for two images are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:45, 16 November 2021 (UTC)