Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Positive illusions about the self

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Hi Jenna, This is an article that may be of interest: https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/abs/pii/S0010440X15301322?casa_token=8Th8-GnEsxMAAAAA:9xdejeo7CQXKh59jtRzHg1W--aPNRD1MVTXttKgRZtg2eeqyxI-b_5Xwx5OxcGVHDdBA4NrKk9k --U3205964 (discuss • contribs) 07:37, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Key points Excellent Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Use British/Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words et al. needs a period Write using 3rd person perspective Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Cite each reference at least once in the main text. Conclusion (the most important section): well developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent Caption uses APA style. Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Excellent The book needs publisher details Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:08, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions. The chapter engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are described and explained. The theoretical discussion is somewhat abstract. More examples could help to bring it to life and make it more accessible to a broad audience. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Reduce use of weasel words (e.g., "it is evident that") which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning. Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Grammar Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. Good use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Basic use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:58, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. There is probably too much content presented within the allocated time frame. Consider zooming out and providing a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. Concentrating on the positive illusion work by Shelley Taylor could help to refine the focus. Ideally, also consider the potential downsides of positive illusions. The presentation makes little/no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides well explained information. The presentation contains appropriate citations. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. Very good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with text and image. Some slides contain too much text to easily read while listening to the audio. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Presumably images are from PowToon but this isn't explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:48, 15 November 2021 (UTC)