Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Perseverance

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Hi,

I found this really interesting and short video that gives a great description of what perseverance is, please feel free to add it to your External links. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=16UUo4tOoVY&t=40s --U103219 (discusscontribs) 05:49, 29 August 2021 (UTC)Reply

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  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest.
  3. Establish a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand.
  4. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  5. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s).
  1. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio.
  2. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  4. Audio recording quality was good.
  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides.
  3. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  4. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read.
  5. The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time.
  6. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided.
  3. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter.
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation.
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:36, 23 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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  1. Overall, this chapter makes very good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
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  1. Solid Overview.
  2. Explains the problem or phenomenon.
  3. Clear focus question(s).
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. There is too much general motivational theory, leading to the chapter being over the maximum word count. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Goal pursuit).
  1. Good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.
  3. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.
  4. Place more emphasis on explaining the underlying theoretical constructs than methods of measurement.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.
  2. Report about research findings in more detail and about measurement tools in less detail.
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Good critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.
  1. Good summary.
  2. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
  2. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.).
  3. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    3. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    4. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned.
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
      3. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
    5. Citations use correct APA style.
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  3. Excellent use of image(s).
  4. No use of table(s).
  5. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  6. No use of quiz(zes).
  7. Good use of case studies or examples.
  8. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  9. Good use of external links in the "External links" section.
  10. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
  1. ~4 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.
  2. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:09, 24 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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