Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Perceived behavioural control and motivation

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly formatted Wording of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Promising 2-level heading structure If using PBC as an abbreviation, do so consistently Key points Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts. Good balance of theory and research seems to be developing Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption uses APA style Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Identify more specific links Also link to relevant book chapters External links Good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:19, 15 September 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hi there! PBC is a very fascintating topic! I noticed that there was not much applied research for your area of focus. Here is a very fascinting study that highlights how PBC can effect motivation/intentions for exercise behaviours (https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S1469029204000330). Good luck on completing your chapter :)

Hey! This topic is super interesting, but I noticed that you don't have one of the core articles about learned helplessness. It was super unethical and pretty sad for the dogs but interesting nonetheless. Essentialy the dogs couldn't stop being zapped by the shocks and learned to no longer resist. So they had no behavioural control and as a result no motivation to escape the stimuli https://www.annualreviews.org/doi/pdf/10.1146/annurev.me.23.020172.002203 --U3202984 (discuss • contribs) 12:09, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. Under the maximum word count. The main areas for potential improvement are that the written expression is very abstract. Ideally, the chapter could be rewritten is simpler terms, with more examples, to make it more accessible and interesting to a lay audience. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Where does the quote end? Explain the problem or phenomenon more clearly. The relationship with self-efficacy seems like a side-issue and doesn't warrant a focus question. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Good coverage of relevant theory is provided. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self-control). Theory — Depth The theory could be worded in a more accessible way and abbreviated. Tables and/or lists could be used to more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration There is good integration between theory and research. Conclusion Insufficient summary because it is abstract and vague. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. A lot of the written expression is quite abstract, which makes this a difficult read for an unfamiliar reader. Consider ways of simplifying the written expression to make it more accessible to a wider audience. This is the essence of science communication. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. incredibly) in science-based communication. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.). APA style Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Check and correct consistency of formatting across references. Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). No use of table(s). No use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies or examples. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~7 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:56, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest . Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological research. Include citations. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Check consistency of gender pronouns between audio and visual. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data Export the Canva video to YouTube so that meta-data (title, description, license etc.) can be added. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from Canva but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:56, 23 November 2021 (UTC)