Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Panic

Topic development feedback

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Title Not provided. I've added it. User page About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Overall, very well developed, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Promising balance of theory and research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Figure Excellent A figure is presented. Caption uses APA style. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Excellent External links Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:25, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Minor edit

Hey! I noticed your section 'what causes panic' did not have a question mark with it, I fixed this for grammatical purposes --Brianna Meddemmen (discuss • contribs) 13:37, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is the quality of written expression, particularly grammar. This chapter is well under/over the maximum word count. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. There is other feedback about the topic development that has been ignored, so it is not repeated in these book chapter comments. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview, including a case study. Clear focus question(s). Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Critical thinking is evidenced by discussing the direction of relationships. Critical thinking could be further evidenced by considering the strength of relationships. Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Well developed. Clear take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good, but let down somewhat by grammatical errors. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Figures and tables Figures are very well captioned. Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. Written expression — Learning features Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, mostly minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:26, 1 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Overview This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest . Display and narrate an opening slide with the title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is established. Focus questions are presented. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech. Audio recording quality was OK. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:51, 20 November 2021 (UTC)