Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Non-English emotion words

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Hi there, chapter looks awesome well done. The only edit that I saw may need changing was the "Table 2. Selected body-emotion Aboriginal expressions of emotion", which was a different font to your other tables. Otherwise good job :) --U3198955 (discuss • contribs) 09:37, 17 October 2021 (UTC)U3198955

Heyyyyyy! Wow your book chapter is SO GOOD! I especially love how interactive it is and how it includes a link to a youtube video (I'm gonna steal this idea lol) as well as the ability for readers to contribute. If I had to grade you I'd give you 100/100. WELL DONE! --Gracehowie (discuss • contribs) 06:45, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi there, hope you don't mind but I made a few small grammatical adjustments (commas/apostrophes etc) - another note: make sure any research cited also includes a year of publication, I noticed a few mentions of Ekman and Lomas that had no date but didn't want to guess at these from your reference list. A really interesting topic I enjoyed reading it. --U3194580 (discuss • contribs) 12:20, 13 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi! I found this topic extremely interesting and felt engaged throughout. My favourite part was the reader contributions at the end - that is a really smart idea. IsabellaMont

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Well developed 1-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Potentially could benefit from further development by expanding into a second-level structure. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion (the most important section): shaping up well what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? "Ask reader to seek and share non-English words that describe human emotion" - could be a useful discussion thread on UCLearn Canvas and/or Twitter #emot21 Figure A figure is presented. Caption should include Figure X. ... (period but not colon) Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view. References Excellent Include doi for first reference Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:54, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Fremdscham

German, meaning a feeling of shame for actions done by someone else. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:12, 19 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a fascinating, rich chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is in the quality of written expression and better use of Wikiveristy features such as bullet points for the See also and External links sections. The use of images was also problematic. The chapter provides very good coverage of theory, but could expand its coverage of research by providing more detail about the reviewed sttudies. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Consider adding some examples and/or figures to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. More detail about the reviewed research would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion Clear take-home messages. Expand the dot points into sentences. Written expression — Style Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Written expression Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Use sentence casing (i.e., remove capitalisation except for first letter and proper nouns) Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., some words are all in capitals). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use citations rather than "the author/s". Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Format bullet-points and numbered lists (e.g., for External links), per Tutorial 1. Problematic use of image(s). This image: File:Figure 1- Lego figures display emotions.png is not your own work and the license is not compatible with WIkimedia Commons, so it has been nominated for deletion. This image: File:Men completing at the Paralympics.jpg. File name is misspelt. I doubt this is own work. Olympics images are usually copyright restricted, so I've nominated it for deletion. This image: File:Aboriginal art.jpg has been uploaded as your own work without acknowledgement of the source. Although it appears to be from https://www.flickr.com/photos/jymloke/3561886005, it does not appear that original artist permission has been obtained, so I've nominated it for deletion. This image: File:Image-1589521204Gqz.jpg is allowed to be used. I've added the author, source, and license. Excellent use of table(s), including a user-edited table . Very good use of feature box(es). Very good use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, mostly minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:09, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. Narrate the title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest. A context for the topic is established. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a good take-home message(s). Audio The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Audio recording quality was OK. The volume varied noticeably between slides. Probably an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:47, 18 November 2021 (UTC)