Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Mindfulness and creativity

Heading casing

Hi Joekon200029. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:25, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Journal article and Ted Talks video recommendation

Hi there,

I have found a relevant peer-reviewed journal article that may be able to help you. It can be found by clicking on this link and signing in via your UC institution login. I have also found a highly relevant Ted Talks presentation video that can be found by clicking on this link. These two sources provide in-depth information on the relationship between mindfulness and creativity which can be helpful for developing your book chapter. --Vertese (discuss • contribs) 03:36, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The wording of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. External link provided to book chapter - suggest using internal link per Tutorial 1 Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Underdeveloped - aim for more descriptive headings that relate directly to the topic Key points Insufficient Figure A figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... (note italics) Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Use APA referencing style Resources See also Very good Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:26, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Section - Theoretical framework of mindfulness

Hi there,

It looks like this section of your chapter has nothing in it so far, and because there is a need to discuss theory in the chapter it will be important to have this section well written. I'm not sure how far you have gotten with this and I apologise if this is already going over things you are currently writing, but I hope this is helpful in some way nonetheless.

As a note, all links to references can be accessed via APAPsyArticles, logging in via the UC Library databases.

One place to consider starting at is writing about mindfulness as part of implicit motivation. This is mentioned in the textbook on p407 (Chapter 16) but implicit motives affecting behaviour is a good starting point for theory. There's not much to go on in the book per se, but writing about implicit motivations may help.

Another avenue to potentially write about is here - https://doi.apa.org/doiLanding?doi=10.1037%2Fteo0000027. Of particular note is how this reference talks about how Edward Langer approached mindfulness from a cognitive perspective, but also about how Langer's work compares with relational mindfulness (another theory about mindfulness tied to Eastern thought). Given that Ellen Langer is a bit of a big name in regard to cognitive mindfulness you might be able to find a video to link to for your 'See also' section, depending on if you think it lines up with your chapter.

Finally, I found this piece on mindfulness and Buddhist emptiness theory. It's pretty new so the only piece I found so far is here: https://doi.apa.org/doiLanding?doi=10.1037%2Frel0000079. The idea that Eastern psychology could influence how Western psychology is approached would be an interesting idea to present.

Keep up the good work!

--U3020459 (discuss • contribs) 07:26, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The main areas for potential improvement are: Providing less about mindfulness in general, and more about the relationship between mindfulness and creavitity. More indepth coverage of theory and research. The quality of written expression can be improved. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Clarify of written expression can be improved. Clear focus question(s). Ideally, tie the text more closely to psychological theory and research. Consider introducing a case study or example to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth There is too much general theoretical material about mindfulness in general - and too little about mindfulness and creativity. Instead, summarise mindfulness and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., mindfulness and creativity). Theory — Depth Insufficient depth of use of psychological theory that can explain the relationship between M and C. More practical examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Insufficient integration of theory and research. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Conclusion Basic summary. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Reduce use of weasel words (e.g., "prove to be" -> "be") which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning. Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. incredible) in science-based communication. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Check and correct formatting for "et al." Check that all citations include the year of publication. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Check and correct formatting of hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of practical tips. Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, social contribution with direct links to evidence. ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:15, 9 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Overview Narrate and display the correct title and sub-title on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory. Ideally, more detail about the specific (how mindfulness can affect creativity) could be presented. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. Including key citations could help to map the key points to research. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was good. There was some minor buffeting - microphone too close? Video Overall, visual display quality is good to very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The main area for improvement is that several slides are very busy visually - too much to take in while also listening to narration. The amount of text per slide should be reduced. Most of the font sizes are sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:11, 19 November 2021 (UTC)