Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Mental toughness

Latest comment: 1 year ago by U3210431 in topic Resources

Heading casing edit

 
FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development


-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:00, 7 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback edit

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Title edit

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page edit

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution edit

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Headings edit

  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  3. Impact of COVID-19 - this could be used as a case study (although there is still limited evidence), but isn't part of the core topic (i.e., the sub-title).

Key points edit

  1. Minimal development of key points - mostly the topic development currently consists of references
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  3. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info
  4. Move references into the References section - and just include citations in the main body
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure edit

  1. A figure is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points about psychology theory or research being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References edit

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation

Resources edit

  1. See also
    1. Very good
    2. Include source in brackets after link (fixed)
    3. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:00, 7 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Comment edit

Hey there, your chapter looks great! Just added a couple of hyperlinks and corrected some spelling mistakes, enjoy! [[[[User:U3187208--U3187208 (discusscontribs) 01:20, 17 October 2021 (UTC)]]]]Reply

formatting edit

Hey! i moved your conclusion section up as there was a bunch of space left in between the conclusion and previous section --Brianna Meddemmen (discusscontribs) 14:05, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Video Relating to Mental Toughness edit

Hi there! This is a really great topic and a very interesting read! I am leaving this link here to a speech from the king of mental toughness, David Goggins. He provides insight into why he is so mentally tough (the speech will motivate you to run through a brick wall as well). Hope you enjoy! --Vertese (discusscontribs) 11:18, 18 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback edit

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter.
  3. Well over the maximum word count (with references included).
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview edit

  1. Well developed Overview.
  2. Clarity of description of MT could be improved.
  3. Consider mentioning relationship with closely relate constructs such as psychological resilience.
  4. Useful example.
  5. Clear focus question(s).

Theory — Breadth edit

  1. Relevant theory is reasonably well explained.
  2. A deeper conceptual unpacking of MT would be helpful.
  3. Useful to have comparison and contrast with related constructs.
  4. Build more strongly on other resilience-related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Psychological resilience).

Theory — Depth edit

  1. Reasonable depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Place more emphasis on explaining the underlying theoretical constructs (more interesting) than methods of measurement (less interesting). Relates to Table 1.
  3. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.

Research — Key findings edit

  1. Good overview of relevant research.

Research — Critical thinking edit

  1. Good critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. considering the strength of relationships
    2. acknowledging specific limitations
    3. suggesting specific directions for future research

Integration edit

  1. Discussion of theory and research is reasonably well integrated.

Conclusion edit

  1. The Conclusion is rather abstract and vague.
  2. What are the answers to the sub-title/focus questions?
  3. What are the practical, take-home messages?

Written expression — Style edit

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonable.
    2. Well over maximum word count.
    3. Clarity of written expression can be improved (e.g., see tags such as [what?], [which?], and [say what?] which have been added).
    4. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
    3. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., PTSD), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes.
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
  5. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    4. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words.
    5. Figures and tables
      1. APA style is used for Figure captions.
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
      3. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
      4. Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
      5. Figures are very captioned.
    6. Citations use correct APA style.
    7. References use correct APA style, but in a separate document rather than being provided in the wiki page.

Written expression — Learning features edit

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is basic.
  2. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Excellent use of image(s).
  5. Basic use of table(s).
  6. Good use of feature box(es).
  7. Basic use of quiz(zes).
  8. Basic use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution edit

  1. ~17 logged, useful, mostly minor, mostly end-of-semester social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:03, 10 November 2021 (UTC) givesReply

Multimedia feedback

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.

Overview edit

  1. The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Narrate the title/sub-title slide on the opening slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  3. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.
  5. Consider spending a little more time on the Overview and a little less on the Conclusion.

Content edit

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  4. The presentation is well structured.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  6. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research.
  7. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.

Conclusion edit

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Perhaps there could be some more practical messaging (e.g., how can one develop MT?).

Audio edit

  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is well paced.
  4. The audio communication is a little hesitant in some places - could benefit from further practice.
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent.

Video edit

  1. Overall, visual display quality is very good.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with text and images.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The presentation is well produced.

Meta-data edit

  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is not provided.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing edit

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 17 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Resources edit

Hi, this chapter looks really great !

As I am currently working on a project proposal to implement mental toughness in firefighters, I have a suggested source that might come in handy. This source looked at two specialised programs to implement mental toughness in AFL players called the Penn Resiliency Program and the master resilience training. If you get a chance I would encourage you to have a look :)

Steinfort, P. J. (2015). Tough Teammates: Training Grit and Optimism Together Improves Performance in Professional Footballers. Scholarly Commons. https://repository.upenn.edu/mapp_capstone/79/ U3210431 (discusscontribs) 11:39, 10 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

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