Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Meaning in life

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Use in-built heading style (per Tutorial 1) Description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence If making the second or subsequent edit to a page, create the link to evidence like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Promising heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Consider simplifying to 2 levels Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Three out of the four top-level headings are questions (good idea) - consider making the other one a question too Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Overview: promising emphasise a psychological theory/research perspective consider adding an image an example or case study Consider including Victor Frankl's work on meaning and logotherapy There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research Some use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): promising what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent Caption should include Figure X. ... (note: italics) Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Excellent Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Move academic sources into References and cite in the main body

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:07, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Comment

Hi! Great topic! I just wanted to suggest you looking at this TEDx Talk about "The true meaning of life" (Link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SH_2yQcSWnw). Maybe you would like to include it in your external links section. All the best --U3196787 (discuss • contribs) 20:05, 7 October 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hello, your chapter is looking really good so far! I'm just wondering if you are going to expand on the links you have included in 'Self actualisation' and 'Religion and cultural contributors', expanding on the studies will really help with the research perspective for marks. Best of luck! --U3217975 (discuss • contribs) 07:24, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

Yep! That's the plan. Only included the links for the development of my chapter. Thanks for the feedback. If you have any other relevant research, please let me know. Leeeeanne (discuss • contribs) 03:51, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory but limited use of research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. Explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Perhaps it could be helpful to describe the process of logotherapy (e.g., in the case study). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Could be useful to connect to sense of coherence. Tables and/or lists could be used clearly summarise key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures and tables Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Check and correct formatting for citations in parentheses with three or more authors (e.g., (Dezutter, et al., 2013) -> (Dezutter et al., 2013)) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:04, 12 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is a little hesitant in some places - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality is OK. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard/mouse clicks audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is basically supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details. I am doubtful that you created all the image icons used in the presentation, so the source of these should be acknowledged. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:36, 20 November 2021 (UTC)